Site Administrator Graeme Posted June 10, 2009 Site Administrator Share Posted June 10, 2009 Would you... by BeaStKid Sometimes simply encouraging is not enough. :nuke: :nuke: Spoilers Below!!! :nuke: :nuke: Link to comment
AFriendlyFace Posted June 12, 2009 Share Posted June 12, 2009 Would You... by: BeaStKid ***SPOILERS!!!*** What an amusing story! I really fell right into it read along and vividly imagining the events unfolding. In fact I even groaned out loud at this part: Link to comment
Site Administrator Graeme Posted June 14, 2009 Author Site Administrator Share Posted June 14, 2009 The perils of High School dating and infatuations. I'm just so glad I bypassed all of that Well done, BeaStKid! The scene felt so clear to me, and I loved the final touch between Mason and Chris. I wish Melissa had been assertive enough to have really spoken her mind and not let Chris cut her off, but that's life Link to comment
Site Administrator wildone Posted June 14, 2009 Site Administrator Share Posted June 14, 2009 Loved the story BeaStkid . I groaned when I realized what Andy was up to, and could immediately emphathize with him. I'm sure this is the reason why many of us fear to take on certain things, as we picture this happening to us. Kudos to Andy for doing it anyways. Thanks for the story Link to comment
Linxe Termoil Posted June 14, 2009 Share Posted June 14, 2009 all i can do is say "what?". Then i keep looking for more and I realize it's not there and it isn't. It's disappointing, at the least that the more I was expecting ISN'T there, but for what is there, it is definitely a great story. Linxe Link to comment
Meeko Posted June 14, 2009 Share Posted June 14, 2009 Beastie! What a cool, fun, and amusing short story. Like Linxe I kept looking back wishing for more. I love how his friends had a bet going, great story. Link to comment
DragonFire Posted June 14, 2009 Share Posted June 14, 2009 What a cool story BK, short but to the point. I had to chuckle when the cheerleader wore her lunch, but I think that's just the sadist in me! Good job mate. Link to comment
jovian_w2002 Posted June 14, 2009 Share Posted June 14, 2009 Hahaha, this story reminds me of "High school musical" LOL. Nevertheless, it is well-written and humorous! Thanks for such a FUN story! Link to comment
Kia Zi Shiru Posted June 15, 2009 Share Posted June 15, 2009 short, fun and a great laugh I'm looking forward to reading more of your work Link to comment
kitten Posted June 16, 2009 Share Posted June 16, 2009 The story grabbed me right from the start as I tried to guess what Andy's friends were trying to get him to do. I admire the way BK expressed so much in so few words and in such a short space managed to give an insight into this brief snapshot of a short incident in Andy's life. Well done, BK! Kit Link to comment
sat8997 Posted June 17, 2009 Share Posted June 17, 2009 Poor Andy! This was wonderful. Link to comment
David McLeod Posted June 17, 2009 Share Posted June 17, 2009 Cute story with a clever ending. Oh, how I hated high school! Link to comment
C James Posted June 20, 2009 Share Posted June 20, 2009 This was perfect! It made me laugh especially the touch at the end. Well done, BK!! I think my favorite line was "He's going to get whacked, isn't he?" They knew he'd fail, yet they egged him on anyway. Ah, that's what friends are for. Link to comment
jfalkon Posted June 21, 2009 Share Posted June 21, 2009 This was so typical f high school kids! You capured the experience perfectly! Link to comment
Benji Posted June 21, 2009 Share Posted June 21, 2009 ...........That was so typical of High School, great story Bk!! Link to comment
Ieshwar Posted June 27, 2009 Share Posted June 27, 2009 I was almost certain it would be a happy ending. You had me there. But I have to say it was incredibly well written. It was very short but also very enjoyable. Interesting characters, nice setting, intriguing story. One of your bests. Take care, Ieshwar Link to comment
BeaStKid Posted July 4, 2009 Share Posted July 4, 2009 Would You... by: BeaStKid ***SPOILERS!!!*** What an amusing story! I really fell right into it read along and vividly imagining the events unfolding. In fact I even groaned out loud at this part: Just a second before reading: You know an author is telling a story well when the reader literally reacts just as the author narrates that the rest of the 'audience' reacted. With this brief piece I really got a feel for the group dynamic Andy, Chris, Mason, and Melissa have. Well done, Beasty! -Kevin Thanks for the wonderful review, Kev....To tell you the truth, I had a real fun writing this short piece...Glad that you liked it.. The perils of High School dating and infatuations. I'm just so glad I bypassed all of that Well done, BeaStKid! The scene felt so clear to me, and I loved the final touch between Mason and Chris. I wish Melissa had been assertive enough to have really spoken her mind and not let Chris cut her off, but that's life Thanks, Graeme. Even I felt that Melissa should have been assertive, but what would the fun be then, eh? Loved the story BeaStkid . I groaned when I realized what Andy was up to, and could immediately emphathize with him. I'm sure this is the reason why many of us fear to take on certain things, as we picture this happening to us. Kudos to Andy for doing it anyways. Thanks for the story Thanks, Steve... all i can do is say "what?". Then i keep looking for more and I realize it's not there and it isn't. It's disappointing, at the least that the more I was expecting ISN'T there, but for what is there, it is definitely a great story. Linxe I simply couldn't write any more after what I had written. It seemed as the perfect ending and I didn't want to spoil the fun by going any further... Thanks for the comments... Beastie! What a cool, fun, and amusing short story. Like Linxe I kept looking back wishing for more. I love how his friends had a bet going, great story. Lol, I know...I wanted to write more, but as I told Linxe, I couldn't... What a cool story BK, short but to the point. I had to chuckle when the cheerleader wore her lunch, but I think that's just the sadist in me! Good job mate. Thanks, mate...I have a thing against snotty girls, and almost all cheerleaders are portrayed as such in all stories I have ever read... Link to comment
BeaStKid Posted July 4, 2009 Share Posted July 4, 2009 Hahaha, this story reminds me of "High school musical" LOL. Nevertheless, it is well-written and humorous! Thanks for such a FUN story! It is the quintessential high school drama, just like HSM...and I am honoured to be compared to that classic. short, fun and a great laugh I'm looking forward to reading more of your work Thanks, and you can find more of my work in the link provided in my signature... The story grabbed me right from the start as I tried to guess what Andy's friends were trying to get him to do. I admire the way BK expressed so much in so few words and in such a short space managed to give an insight into this brief snapshot of a short incident in Andy's life. Well done, BK! Kit Wow, Kit...thanks for the wonderful review. Coming from you, it means a lot...Thanks... Poor Andy! This was wonderful. I know...you loved it, didn't you... Cute story with a clever ending. Oh, how I hated high school! Thanks, David....and I loved HS, just not these parts... A nice little story Thanks... This was perfect! It made me laugh especially the touch at the end. Well done, BK!! I think my favorite line was "He's going to get whacked, isn't he?" They knew he'd fail, yet they egged him on anyway. Ah, that's what friends are for. Friends....you can't live with them, and you can't do without them!! These two reminded me of a certain Eric in LTMP.... This was so typical f high school kids! You capured the experience perfectly! Thanks, mate... ...........That was so typical of High School, great story Bk!! Thanks, mate.... I was almost certain it would be a happy ending. You had me there. But I have to say it was incredibly well written. It was very short but also very enjoyable. Interesting characters, nice setting, intriguing story. One of your bests. Take care, Ieshwar Awww....you know how to put a blush on a guy, Iesh.... Thanks!! Thanks a ton, people, for all the wonderful and positive comments!! BeaStKid Link to comment
Recommended Posts
Create an account or sign in to comment
You need to be a member in order to leave a comment
Create an account
Sign up for a new account in our community. It's easy!
Register a new accountSign in
Already have an account? Sign in here.
Sign In Now