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    Emi GS
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NaPoWriMo - 2017 - 3. April 3 : Two Prompts Day

My excitement today made me write poems for two prompts. One from "Val" and the second one from "napowrimo.net". Hope you'll enjoy reading them.

Prompt 1 : Write a clean little poem (or several) in this simple form:

2 short lines of descriptive phrase (3 or 4 syllables per line)
2 short lines of descriptive statement
2 short lines of “I” statement, perhaps surprising, unexpected, a “turn.”

 

Roundabout

Lights shine colours,
Jaint wheel turns bright.

 

Gentle wind waft.
Happiness sets.

 

I was amazed
Than I enjoyed.

 

Prompt 2 : Today I’d like to challenge you to write an elegy – a poem that mourns or honors someone dead or something gone by. And I’d like to ask you to center the elegy on an unusual fact about the person or thing being mourned.

 

Lost Love

I was a free and sullen lad
Until he barge into my life
Love is the curse of my Fate's strife
As our tale turn into a traid

 

At first it's just the two of us
We look, fight, and hug each other
We nibble, and kiss in smother
On major shots we both just schuss

 

It started as the less we talk
On daft reasons we start to fight
Our egos ignored who was right
Never knew, when, ship left the dock

 

New ones there, all along with him
But one I see, who might be threat
I am not sure, not just yet
Until I see their lips get prim

 

It's not just then; he, at last, swore
As I became a mournful dove
I lost the one person I love
to the one he has fallen for

A big thanks to Val for helping me by providing me the prompts. Thanks to Maureen Thorson, the website owner and a Poet, for the prompt 2. Thank you all for reading, reviewing, and supporting my poetry. Obviously all mistakes are mine.

~Emi.
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Lisa

Emi, the last two lines of Lost Love are so heartfelt. The whole poem just hit so close to home. I keep reading it over and over again. It's very emotional -- being in a relationship and not really knowing where it all went wrong, and then it's too late; he already found someone else.

 

You did an excellent job with it, Emi.

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4 hours ago, Lisa said:

Emi, the last two lines of Lost Love are so heartfelt. The whole poem just hit so close to home. I keep reading it over and over again. It's very emotional -- being in a relationship and not really knowing where it all went wrong, and then it's too late; he already found someone else.

 

You did an excellent job with it, Emi.

 

Actually those two were the first one I had written in the poem. I don't won't to mourn on the break up, so I developed the remaining poem how everything started and everything that led to lost my love. I am sorry you had get through it. And writing this poem had been a tough task for me. But thank god I went to a carnival in our town and enjoyed. And the second poem is from boarding the roundabout of at least 100 feet or above.

 

Thank you for the kind words of compliments Lisa. 

 

~Emi. 

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Parker Owens

You describe love and heartbreak with elegance and economy. You did well to make me so sad. It is a tribute to your skills.

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Mikiesboy

Well done, Emi. You told us the tale and it was so relatable. Your readers can feel the pain and heartbreak. 

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The elegy was quite sad, which it should be, so you accomplished your task there.  Kudos to you for writing two in one day :) 

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AC Benus

I liked both, but Roundabout really sings with color and motion. I think you did really well bringing that particular prompt challenge to life. 

 

The Elegy on lost love is well done. I like the completeness of the story you've shown us. I also like how you've used the image of lips turning prim :)

 

Nice

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On 06/04/2017 at 8:57 PM, Parker Owens said:

You describe love and heartbreak with elegance and economy. You did well to make me so sad. It is a tribute to your skills.

 

Awwww, don't make me blush. I meant nothing bad, but I am glad you felt sad. A poet need nothing more than this, making a reader to feel. This was the best compliment ever. I appreciate your efforts, both for reading and reviewing. :)

~Emi. 

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On 08/04/2017 at 1:07 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Well done, Emi. You told us the tale and it was so relatable. Your readers can feel the pain and heartbreak. 

 

Thanks for the kind words tim. I appreciate them very much. Thanks for reading and reviewing. :)

~Emi. 

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On 08/04/2017 at 3:30 AM, Valkyrie said:

The elegy was quite sad, which it should be, so you accomplished your task there.  Kudos to you for writing two in one day :) 

 

Thanks to you for that. Your help with the prompts has made me do good on them. Thanks for the nice words Val. I appreciate you for reading and reviewing. :)

~Emi. 

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On 08/04/2017 at 4:51 AM, AC Benus said:

I liked both, but Roundabout really sings with color and motion. I think you did really well bringing that particular prompt challenge to life. 

 

The Elegy on lost love is well done. I like the completeness of the story you've shown us. I also like how you've used the image of lips turning prim :)

 

Nice

 

Actually I was quite sad on this day and Elegy seems to fit for the situation. Lost love always troubles me. Roundabout was my strength. Thank god I agreed to go to the carnival. I enjoyed a lot. Especially, the roundabout.

I have always waited for your comments and compliments on my poems. After all you are my teacher, remember! 

I am glad you enjoyed both the poems. Thanks for reading and reviewing. :)

~Emi. 

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On 10/04/2017 at 9:52 PM, Defiance19 said:

These were well expressed Emi. Great job. 

Thanks Aunt Def. That means a lot. Thanks for reading and reviewing. :)

~Emi. 

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