[dkstories] Rich Boy: Awakening - Chapter 1

[brax]

Interesting start to Dan's new story... Leaves a lot open and mysterious... might this be another sci-fi story after all? Interesting play with the aunt and such... Anyways... i got the first post (again) YAY...

[pitchan]

I really like this first chapter. It look very interesting. I wonder if Worthington will fall for one of his cousin's, the one who could get money if he marries a girl and all lol. He seems kinda blase over his parents death though. Even if he wasn't close to his parents he doesn't seem to feel even a slight bit sad. But then again its just the 1st chapter

[wildone]

Interesting first chapter!!

 

At first when I started reading, I was starting to focus on some parallels. A sixteen year old kid, losing part of his family and then going to move to Arizona with an Aunt that he really didn't know who happens to be a lesbian. But those thoughts went away really quickly, as I got more into the story .

 

It will be interesting to see what you will Categorize this story, as it doesn't really strike me as going the route of Sci Fi. I really enjoyed the Bully, which you did an excellent job and hoping that this might be similar.

 

What will be interesting is how you tie the money into the story, as from the first chapter it appears it will be a major influence on Worthington's life. Will the story focus more on developing relationships with his relatives or more so his antics at school, where it sounds like he takes care of most of his needs?

 

Lastly for fun, I wonder how long he will go by Worthington? It seems like a awkward name that gives the impression immediately that he is rich, stuck up, and doesn't really care about others. So what possible other names or nicknames may the main character may get in future chapters. I'm sure Dan has an idea on this already, but I'm curious what others think.

 

Steve

[Conner]

I'm guessing the story will largely center around Worthington's internal battle between following the Sinclair tradition and his buried desire to be someone else, someone more ordinary, with a life of his own. Right now, of course, he's firmly planted in taking on the Sinclair way. He accepts the script that has already been written for him....albeit with the side adventures he's already mentioned - but even that seems to be part of the Sinclair way.

 

Imagine growing up with the 'values' that appear to be part of Worthington's very persona....people come and go, don't get attached; always be aware of someone's motivation for doing something...I'm sure there are more.

 

Pitchan's suggestion about Worthington hooking up with his aunt's biological son makes a lot of sense. It would certainly be congruous with Worthington's plans to marry but have a male 'companion' on the side. It would also suit the Aunt's son, I imagine, if he wants to inherit his mother's family fortune.

 

I'm anxious to learn the 'facts' surrounding his father's will - the things Randall is keeping to himself right now.

 

Conner

[Gil Andrews]

I think there is a lot going on in this story that we haven't been told yet. Dan is excellent in hiding things in plain site. There is all the obvious stuff that have been mention in the above posts, but there is something else completely that I am curious about. His Aunt says something about him being raised with a different code of ethics and stresses that he will not use his abilities to compel people into doing things they wouldn't normally do. He(Worthington) seemed to have missed the meaning behind this but I didn't. I think this family has some kind of extra sensory perception thing going on. There were clues all over in this chapter. I think Worthington can feel peoples emotions, read their minds and project his will onto other people. In fact, I think the whole family can. It kind of reminds me of the movie, The Covenant. Old money, inherited power, family secrets so deep the make the grand canyon look like a regular hole in the ground.

 

Still though, this is the first chapter, and I might be reading way to much into things. We'll see how it all plays out.

[JayScott]

So far, so interesting!

 

But, I wonder if DK will eventually tire of having to type "Worthington" over and over and over?? That is a bit of a long name...

 

[brax]

I agree with Gil... It really seemed like the aunt meant more than what he thought she did... And Dan just LOVESSS forshadowing...

[Jack Scribe]

I think there is a lot going on in this story that we haven't been told yet. Dan is excellent in hiding things in plain site. There were clues all over in this chapter. I think Worthington can feel peoples emotions, read their minds and project his will onto other people.

 

The obvious reference to this being a Sci Fi story makes me wonder about the significance of the lightening striking more than once at the estate. How does this 16 year old lad manage to get his way with the workers...and as a top? There's no reference to money being paid other than after the fact. Hmmm. I also suspect that the lawyer and the deceased father were more than friends. I also wonder about the cousins back in Arizona. Fallow questions.

 

Worthington is a hand-full of a name. Maybe Dan types in "Wo" and then edits each page by substituting the full name on search?

 

Nice first chapter. Good to understand that the first two volumes are completed. Should mean a nice, even flow of chapters.

 

Jack

[SonoLuminus]

I agree with Gil... It really seemed like the aunt meant more than what he thought she did... And Dan just LOVESSS forshadowing...

 

I agree. And the lightning storm seems to be too much of a freak accident to actually *be* an accident.

[dkstories]

I've been meaning to ask this SonoLuminus...there was a great Harry/Draco fanfic a while back, very long, and very well written with a title very similar to your handle here. Any connection?

[SonoLuminus]

No, not familiar with it at all (although it does sound interesting). I got my name from an Erasure song title.

[EMoe57]

Hey DK! There are some good ideas here. Maybe DK should pause the posting and work some of these ideas into the storyline. I'm sure everybody will be patient - right? :wacko:

 

The whole 'name' thing is a good point. We already have a Dubya in the White House so we shouldn't go there; Thing is in the movies these days, and who wants to be nicknamed Ton? It's definitely not descriptive. Whacha think?

 

And how do you type Worthington over & over and not get it typo'd at least once?

 

One final thought: I refer you to my siggie posted here for posterity since I've been known to change it on occassion...

It is said that H. L. Mencken answered all his mail, pleasant or unpleasant, with just one line:

You may be right.

[Rigel]

Worthie seems to be a truly unlikeable bloke and unsympathetic character, and it will be interesting to see if he can be redeemed into a mensch. It will take a lot of work to make Sinc a loveable person, starting with efforts on the part of his lesbian aunt, but the process may prove to be a fascinating coming-of-age story.

 

--Rigel

[BlueSoxSWJ]

Pitchan's suggestion about Worthington hooking up with his aunt's biological son makes a lot of sense. It would certainly be congruous with Worthington's plans to marry but have a male 'companion' on the side. It would also suit the Aunt's son, I imagine, if he wants to inherit his mother's family fortune.

 

I'm anxious to learn the 'facts' surrounding his father's will - the things Randall is keeping to himself right now.

 

Conner

 

I was also wondering about a bunch of technicalities:

 

Still, her family

[Ieshwar]

I don't know if it's a normal mdern fiction or sci-fic. But my mind neevr went towrds the sci-fic when reading it.

 

But the lightning was definitely mysterious. I was think about that attorney.He seems ok, but in movies, ok guys are the villains. And I was thinking if somehow, he didn't cause that lightning (using modern stuff).

 

Worthington is an interesting charcter. I' damn sure that in the future chapters, we'll see some proper maturing.

 

Very interesting story and waiting for more,

Ieshwar

[theschnauzers]

A quick note "legitimate" as used in that will provision would mean "in wedlock," as opposed to "illegitimate," as in "out of wedlock, i.e., a bastard.

 

The way that will provision is written, Worthington would have every reason and motive to try and prevent his cousin from being married to a woman and having a child within the marriage. Now what would happen if the cousin got married to a guy in Massachusetts and then adopted a child would make a very interesting question

[brax]

The lightning idea is quite interesting. It's pretty unlikely that lightning will KILL an entire party of people. Lightning strikes people all the time and they dont die, some do some dont, its unlikely that if all these people got hit at the same time (which unless they were all holding eachotehr chest to back is pretty much impossible by the laws of physics concerning lightning) that they would ALL die. When thinking back the way the lawyer mentioned the "luck" at which the lightning hit the lightning rod it gets pretty complicated... Maybe they had a steel dance floor at the party or somthing... haha

[TonyM]

Hmm, the sci-fi angle does make sense. I think that someone from the type of upbringing Worthington has had would not have the knowledge of "lesser" lifestyles to come up with his imaginings. It would make more sense if it was in fact some type of ESP and he's not aware of it yet. When he tries to rationalize where the images are coming from, he concludes it must just be his imagination and over time he just accepted that as fact.

 

Watch, we'll all continue to voice our opinions on what fantastical angle Dan is going to take this story and at the very end it will end up that there's nothing "special" about any of the characters!

[C James]

I'm afraid I'll have to go with those who find the lightning suspicious. I find it highly so, and think that just might be a key to the plot. So too with the aunt's comment on abilities.

 

[StormyParis]

I've just finished the first chapter... looks promising, as always.

 

One problem: any story about someone habing to move to Arizona should have "Arizona. Ari-fri-kin-zona" as early as possible in it. Too bad a Worthington couldn't be expected such a common turn of phrase.

 

Thanks for the stories Dan