Jack Scribe Posted March 7, 2007 Posted March 7, 2007 CJ, Congratulations on being awarded the 2006 Best acknowledgements. For the Love is not only the best efiction story of the year, but shirtless Steve and shithead Eric take top honors respectively as most lovable and most evil characters. I'll save another entry to gush over your short story anthology awards. I'm now going to read the latest chapter. xoxo, Jack
Bondwriter Posted March 7, 2007 Posted March 7, 2007 Beware of guys with leather gloves and handcuffs! Nice chapter. It's hard to believe these police officers could get away with kidnapping and murder, but it happens all the time in fiction, so it must have some grounding in real life too. Still not going to get you the endorsement of the Arizona Board of Tourism. But Medium mustn't get it either. Don't Chris and Steve ever get fat, eating all this pizza? And what's up with these people calling them Shawn and Chase (well, there are worse names to be called); not much of a theory right now, except maybe they had their pics taken and posted somewhere by the nefarious Thaddeus/ Sheriff pair. More questions raised. Eric is not in a big hurry to make his move. That's weird. What happens if in the end we find out he indeed was a victim himself? Does Eric lose his best villain prize? Congrats over the awards for this fine piece of work, by the way.. My favourite line in this chapter (the double entendre one was a contender): "Ever since the sporting goods store shut down, this place has been useless for clothes except for jeans." Speedo fetish, anyone?
C James Posted March 7, 2007 Author Posted March 7, 2007 If I was to venture a guess, I would have to say those names may be code names used by the Piedmont cops, or whoever is behind the whole setup. The guys who approached the boys where there to keep an eye on their movements. Hence, the chase. Shawn, I have no clue. Tip of the Iceberg might have worked as a title also. So far, all we know is what's on the surface of this mystery. It's whats under the surface that we can't see yet. Hmmmm, "Tip of the Iceberg" would have worked, you are right! The next few chapters do basically expose the "iceberg". Thanks Talonrider! CJ,Congratulations on being awarded the 2006 Best acknowledgments. For the Love is not only the best efiction story of the year, but shirtless Steve and shithead Eric take top honors respectively as most lovable and most evil characters. I'll save another entry to gush over your short story anthology awards. I'm now going to read the latest chapter. xoxo, Jack Thanks, Jack, and I can assure you that no one was more surprised than I by those results. The only one I thought I had even a chance at was the "best antagonist" one for "The Muse". But my stories are very much a team effort, so thanks to everyone. Beware of guys with leather gloves and handcuffs! Nice chapter. It's hard to believe these police officers could get away with kidnapping and murder, but it happens all the time in fiction, so it must have some grounding in real life too. Still not going to get you the endorsement of the Arizona Board of Tourism. But Medium mustn't get it either. Unfortunately, things like that have happened. Also, if you want an example of an outrageous Arizona Sheriff, just google on 'Sheriff Joe' sometime. Some of his antics would seem far-fetched in fiction. As for Cops committing murder, check out this page http://www.copwatch.org/copsascons.html it has a very incomplete list of conspiracies, felonies, and a few murders committed by police officers. Ummm, I know I'm missing something here... But what is the "Medium" reference? I don't get it? My favourite line in this chapter (the double entendre one was a contender): "Ever since the sporting goods store shut down, this place has been useless for clothes except for jeans." Speedo fetish, anyone? Hehehehehe!!!!!!!!!! Well, Steve does have a known fondness for those, 'tis true, but sporting goods stores also carry tank-tops, boardies, running shorts, etc, all of which he is known to be fond of. Incidentally, that local mall was no stretch: I know of a few like that; just a few stores, carrying only really generic stuff, often years out of date, and no other mall for a hundred miles in any direction.
Bondwriter Posted March 7, 2007 Posted March 7, 2007 But what is the "Medium" reference? I don't get it? It takes place in Phoenix, Arizona. I think about you every time I see Patricia Arquette, CJames... Hehehehehe!!!!!!!!!! Well, Steve does have a known fondness for those, 'tis true, but sporting goods stores also carry tank-tops, boardies, running shorts, etc, all of which he is known to be fond of. Incidentally, that local mall was no stretch: I know of a few like that; just a few stores, carrying only really generic stuff, often years out of date, and no other mall for a hundred miles in any direction. Sorry if I project my own fantasies. In the Midwest, there are malls just like that also.
Ieshwar Posted March 7, 2007 Posted March 7, 2007 Hi, CONGRATS! CONGRATS! CONGRATS! CONGRATS! And CONGRATS!! But I would say a bigger THANK YOUfor giving us such a marvelous story! The award is well deserved. You did a great job. Ieshwar P.S Sorry I'm a bit late.
old bob Posted March 7, 2007 Posted March 7, 2007 hey CJ, Your story become even better with each new chapter. A real thriller, and you open at each step new ways for our imagination to construct new paths about Eric and the cops from Piedmont. Bet the best one is the hacking of "this f**king Data thing", when will it occur ?? BTW, remember what we talked about your "skill" to describe sex scenes. I found the best in one of your former chapters : Our sex life was great and getting even better. I'd never imagined it could be so good. Whether we were in Steve's room or my apartment, I don't think a day passed without at least two hot and steamy lovemaking sessions. Clear, precise, each word in its place! Just to remember that it's well a "gay story" but that the important is the Thriller. I like the way you write, and the Awards are more than deserved (As one of your fans, I'm happy that my vote was confirmed). old Bob
Site Administrator Graeme Posted March 7, 2007 Site Administrator Posted March 7, 2007 I'm intrigued by the Chase/Shawn thing, too. I noticed that the initials match Chris and Shawn so it is likely there is a link -- maybe they are code names used by the crooked cops for Chris and Steve (they can't get into trouble if overheard because obviously the names are different), but that doesn't explain why apparent strangers are recognising them. The other probable link is to Thaddeus's campaign -- but that's still not clear. Could it be that the preacher has been using the wrong names in his sermons, but using the correct pictures? People will recognise the boys from the pictures and a couple have asked to confirm the name -- such as the "I know you, but you don't know me" comment when the guy came up to say hello to Steve. One thing -- I had the impression that Thaddeus was based in Peidmont -- but that could be because the sheriff there is his brother-in-law. I don't believe it was stated previously AND Betty had one of the flyers from Thaddeus which is quite believeable if the church was just around the corner. Of course, it is also possible that he preachers at more than one church -- one near the bookshop and one in Peidmont. The other thing that struck me -- one of the policemen indicated he wasn't involved with whatever is going on, but he helped with what he had to know was an illegal arrest (attempted kidnapping wouldn't be too strong a term for it). That implies he knows something, but I suspect he doesn't know the big picture -- or the big picture is NOT illegal. His comments implies that there is a potential break in the ranks of those with the sheriff. Overall, lots of interesting things with more to come. Well done, CJ!
C James Posted March 7, 2007 Author Posted March 7, 2007 (edited) It takes place in Phoenix, Arizona. I think about you every time I see Patricia Arquette, CJames... Sorry if I project my own fantasies. In the Midwest, there are malls just like that also. I'm not saying you aren't partially right about Steve, just that he might have other things on his list instead, or as well. And talk about culture shock; I had never heard of the show "medium", but a quick google of that and the name turned it up. Considering you are in France, that is astounding to me! (but, I almost never watch TV, so I'm rather uninformed in that area.) Thanks, I had no idea!! Hi, CONGRATS! CONGRATS! CONGRATS! CONGRATS! And CONGRATS!! But I would say a bigger THANK YOUfor giving us such a marvelous story! The award is well deserved. You did a great job. Ieshwar P.S Sorry I'm a bit late. Welcome, ieshwar!!! Thanks, and thank you for reading. I'm having an absolute blast. :-) hey CJ,Your story become even better with each new chapter. A real thriller, and you open at each step new ways for our imagination to construct new paths about Eric and the cops from Piedmont. Bet the best one is the hacking of "this f**king Data thing", when will it occur ?? BTW, remember what we talked about your "skill" to describe sex scenes. I found the best in one of your former chapters : Clear, precise, each word in its place! Just to remember that it's well a "gay story" but that the important is the Thriller. I like the way you write, and the Awards are more than deserved (As one of your fans, I'm happy that my vote was confirmed). old Bob Thank you Bob! I'm truly flattered, more than I could ever put into words... One thing -- I had the impression that Thaddeus was based in Peidmont -- but that could be because the sheriff there is his brother-in-law. I don't believe it was stated previously AND Betty had one of the flyers from Thaddeus which is quite believeable if the church was just around the corner. Of course, it is also possible that he preachers at more than one church -- one near the bookshop and one in Peidmont. I had to go looking for that myself (I didn't remember, and I write the darn thing!), as I had a sudden sinking feeling that I'd never mentioned the location of his Church. I only found the one reference, very easy to miss; The Lonesome Valley Southern Baptist Church, Sunday night, 6pm, emergency action meeting. Rev. Thaddeus J. Emoe, pastor. That was the quote from the flyer in Ch 9, and It doesn't say exactly where the church is, but it does use Lonesome Valley as part of the name, and lists Thaddeus as the pastor of that church. BTW, you aren't the only one to be surprised that Thaddeus' church isn't in Piedmont, which means I probably should have worked it in more recently. Thanks!!! Edited March 7, 2007 by C James
Jack Frost Posted March 8, 2007 Posted March 8, 2007 I just want to say I'm a lurker, unlike C James.
C James Posted March 9, 2007 Author Posted March 9, 2007 I just want to say I'm a lurker, unlike C James. Hey! You are not a lurker! Lurkers almost never post, and you just posted! And I should know, becuase, unlike you, I am a lurker! BTW, have I mentioned the title of the next chapter yet? It's called "Fire and Ice".
EMoe57 Posted March 11, 2007 Posted March 11, 2007 Mighty quiet around here... Your new chapter title nmust've scared everyone away, CJ!
Conner Posted March 12, 2007 Posted March 12, 2007 Congratulations, CJ! You realize, of course, that this award pales in comparison to the Goat Good Seal of Approval! :wacko: Fire and Ice Great name for the next chapter. Ok, let me see, fire and ice would make steam and, as everyone knows or should know, steam is steamy. Ergo, the next chapter will be hot and steamy! Yeah, another pool party with Steve and Chris!
C James Posted March 12, 2007 Author Posted March 12, 2007 Mighty quiet around here... Your new chapter title nmust've scared everyone away, CJ! LoL! Could be! Well, they shall find out soon enough... Congratulations, CJ! You realize, of course, that this award pales in comparison to the Goat Good Seal of Approval! :wacko: How true! Fire and Ice Great name for the next chapter. Ok, let me see, fire and ice would make steam and, as everyone knows or should know, steam is steamy. Ergo, the next chapter will be hot and steamy! Yeah, another pool party with Steve and Chris! Not another pool party, but as for the rest, all I can say is , and also that it will be posted within 24 hours.
Bondwriter Posted March 13, 2007 Posted March 13, 2007 Fire and Ice Great name for the next chapter. Ok, let me see, fire and ice would make steam and, as everyone knows or should know, steam is steamy. Ergo, the next chapter will be hot and steamy! Yeah, another pool party with Steve and Chris! These goats are quite horny beings, aren't they? I wonder if they taste good... I'd bet with Master of Cunning Deceit CJames, the "Fire and Ice" thing will have to deal with a volunteer firefighter they meet at the pizza joint and who calls them Shawn or Chase, since it seems fashionable in Lonesome Valley, and the ice thing will be the ice-maker of the fridge breaking down, and Steve's mom coming inside Steve's room as they're about to make out to tell them to go get a spare part at the hardware store.
C James Posted March 13, 2007 Author Posted March 13, 2007 These goats are quite horny beings, aren't they? I wonder if they taste good... I'd bet with Master of Cunning Deceit CJames, the "Fire and Ice" thing will have to deal with a volunteer firefighter they meet at the pizza joint and who calls them Shawn or Chase, since it seems fashionable in Lonesome Valley, and the ice thing will be the ice-maker of the fridge breaking down, and Steve's mom coming inside Steve's room as they're about to make out to tell them to go get a spare part at the hardware store. Hey now! No putting me on the menu! I can't write if I'm cooked! Well, good guesses, but I'm fariad there has been a slight change of plans regarding the posting of Ch 17, "Fire and Ice. I'd originally planned iut for Tuesday afternoon my time, but, I have an appointment in the morning so I was unlikely to be able to keep that time. I therefor, and I apologize for any inconvenience caused by my non-tardyness, I've decided to post a few hours early. Chapter 17, Fire and Ice, is up!
EMoe57 Posted March 13, 2007 Posted March 13, 2007 Great! More convoluted goat thinking there, CJ! :nuke:
Bondwriter Posted March 13, 2007 Posted March 13, 2007 Nice chapter. The erotic scene is pretty good, though personally I'm not longing for these in the story. But they're nice when they come along! It's humorous, and Steve and Chris as Kim Basinger and Mickey Rourke wannabes is fun. If it was up to me, they'd use more silk ties! I was wrong about the fire/ ice thing. You goats seem to think alike. My Chase and Shawn theory seems to be the right one. Their pics are all over the Internet. But how come no one they know saw them yet? Is it on some shady site, www.chaseshawnandthebaptistpreacher.org? Something that caters to the people with a serious religious fetish, with Steve and Chris' faces put on the (clad) bodies of Thaddeus and Jerry Falwell. Yes, some people do have weird fantasies... *sighs* Not a big fan of fire weapons, so them training at the shooting range rings VERY American to my European ears. Makes it more exotic, I guess. But I like the fact they're no sissies. I'd rather see them win a hand-to-hand fight than a gun fight though. Manlier IMO. Their shopping spree is a bit too much, isn't it? 400$ on clothes? Don't they have books to buy? A tuition to pay in a near future? Presents for their parents? Come on, guys, don't be vain!
Conner Posted March 13, 2007 Posted March 13, 2007 Yes, hot and steamy! That's the way I like it. Extremely well done, CJ! The foreplay was ever so erotic. Personnally, I don't do foreplay anymore. At my age, I need eightplay. Ok, all you beta, zeta, alpha, omega readers - How did Steve get his shorts back on so Chris could dump the ice bucket in them??? Conner
Bondwriter Posted March 13, 2007 Posted March 13, 2007 How did Steve get his shorts back on so Chris could dump the ice bucket in them??? He's pretty talented? And CJames wrote: I flicked lightly at his nipple as I asked,
Conner Posted March 13, 2007 Posted March 13, 2007 Ok. I'm going to give myself 5, no make that 10, feather lashes for being such a smart ass!
C James Posted March 13, 2007 Author Posted March 13, 2007 Great! More convoluted goat thinking there, CJ! :nuke: And this surprises you how, exactly? Nice chapter. The erotic scene is pretty good, though personally I'm not longing for these in the story. But they're nice when they come along! It's humorous, and Steve and Chris as Kim Basinger and Mickey Rourke wannabes is fun. If it was up to me, they'd use more silk ties! I was wrong about the fire/ ice thing. You goats seem to think alike. I'm guessing that a scene like this was in a movie? Drat! As for us goats thinking alike, well, yes, we do. Herd instinct, ya know. Not a big fan of fire weapons, so them training at the shooting range rings VERY American to my European ears. Makes it more exotic, I guess. There is a very different culture in rural areas of the American West regarding firearms. But, I wanted to show them being sensible and having training: Without training, a gun is more dangerous to its owner than to anyone else. :-) Their shopping spree is a bit too much, isn't it? 400$ on clothes? Don't they have books to buy? A tuition to pay in a near future? Presents for their parents? Come on, guys, don't be vain! I was worried about that aspect myself. In fact, i reduced the number twice before putting it back. My reasoning was that they, like I, only get to the big city perhaps once a year, so buying a lot in one day is more understandable. Still, not something I'd do... Anyone have any opinions on this issue? Did I go overboard on the amount? Yes, hot and steamy! That's the way I like it. Extremely well done, CJ! The foreplay was ever so erotic. Personnally, I don't do foreplay anymore. At my age, I need eightplay. Ok, all you beta, zeta, alpha, omega readers - How did Steve get his shorts back on so Chris could dump the ice bucket in them??? Conner Thanks Conner!!! And eightplay, ROFL! to be deleted by moderator. double post ahead There is never a moderator around when you need one... He's pretty talented? And CJames wrote: I flicked lightly at his nipple as I asked,
Jack Scribe Posted March 14, 2007 Posted March 14, 2007 My Chase and Shawn theory seems to be the right one. Their pics are all over the Internet. But how come no one they know saw them yet? Is it on some shady site... Bondwriter is on to something. I think their faces have been photoshopped onto bodies doing some pretty heavy, M/M, queer (fundy talk) stuff. As I recall, only guys have said 'hi' to Chase and Shawn. Oh, no. Don't tell me they're on a site where the guys are all "straight" but somehow are able to perform hedonistic, immoral (to quote the top general of the Army), homosexual acts for cash (wink, wink). Jack
Ephialtes Posted March 14, 2007 Posted March 14, 2007 See. I think Eric was filming them somehow and has been making money off it by making a porn site. Maybe that's what's on the data stick!
shadowgod Posted March 14, 2007 Posted March 14, 2007 See. I think Eric was filming them somehow and has been making money off it by making a porn site. Maybe that's what's on the data stick! I thought the data stick had to do with the sheriff of Piedmont and that Fundy Reverend. If a porn site is on that stick that would make for one big ol' stinkin scandal! I can see the headlines 'Conservative Minister Opens Gay XXX on Web' So this is the question, does life imitate art or does Art imitate life? What i'm curious as to why CJ cut the 'second' explosion from the chapter. It was in the copy I read but is mysteriously absent from the final. Steve
Bondwriter Posted March 14, 2007 Posted March 14, 2007 See. I think Eric was filming them somehow and has been making money off it by making a porn site. Maybe that's what's on the data stick! Hey Ephialtes, can we trust you with the last three digits in your member number? This is a tempting theory, only flaw for me is that the technicalities of managing to shoot/ edit/ sell a porn video secretly seem to be beyond the grasp of the brat. Can Eric be this mean/ wicked/ evil? I'd be more on some cuter newsgroups pics, like twinks in bathing suits. Or something more public, like a Chase and Shawn site advocating the "gay lifestyle"; thus Thaddeus may use this as evidence of their "perverted proselytic ways". I wonder as Steve does about the link between the pics and the Data Stick. shudder at the thought that a man of the cloth and a law enforcement officer could be involved in some sex scandal. But hey, this is fiction!
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