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    Just when I think you have outdone yourself, you outdo yourself yet again. Marvelous chapter, incredible twists
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    Chapter 36

    starboardtack commented on CLJobe's story chapter in Chapter 36

    Confusingly written chapter.
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    Very much looking forward to how this develops. Good start.
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    I loved the way you created a relationship between Donovan and the group of older gentlemen. It was respectful and hilarious. Wonderful writing.
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    Chapter 1

    starboardtack commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Chapter 1

    Never crossed my mind.
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    Chapter 1

    starboardtack commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Chapter 1

    You have a good “eye” for the lives your characters lead and a good ear for dialogue. I am looking forward to see what you do with this story. One question, you named the three Knott brothers as Ryan, Penn and Nathan and then wrote about them as Ryan, Penn and Logan. Did I miss something and, if so, I apologize?
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    Finding Hope

    starboardtack commented on Dahawk's story chapter in Finding Hope

    Just an added thought/twist — one of the long term effects of TBI can be issues with emotional regulation. Levi’s emotional outbursts do smack of that. Not sure whether you had this in mind while writing his character but it would be consistent with his injury on top of the anger about his other trauma related losses. Could add a complication to the plot that you would not want to deal with though. Enjoying this story a lot.
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    I was worried about remembering who the characters were, what roles they played in each others lives, and their stories/histories. You did a superb job re-introducing them. Now I can look forward to the upcoming chapters without feeling like I have to play catch up. Please remind me, how old was Noah when he first came to live with Charlie and how old is he at the end of this chapter.
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    Fort McHenry

    starboardtack commented on jkwsquirrel's story chapter in Fort McHenry

    Delightful end to this chapter,!
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    Chapter 1

    starboardtack commented on Andrew Todd's story chapter in Chapter 1

    It is so good to have you back. I have missed your writing!!! Ireland, redheads, and horses, you sure know how to win this guy’s heart.
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    I seem to have been making a mistake passing by these various and sundry poetry contributions. Today I stopped and it was as if I opened a canvas bag and out tumbled jewels of every color and description. Mistake corrected! Thank you for your contribution — these are wonderful.
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    Chapter 1

    starboardtack commented on Kev's story chapter in Chapter 1

    Love the dialect — reading it and figuring it out help keep my mind agile and helps me appreciate the cultural diversity both within the story and between the story and me.
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    Shoe Day

    starboardtack commented on Richie Tennyson's story chapter in Shoe Day

    There is a touch of Piers Anthony (Crewel Lye: A Caustic Yarn) and a whiff of Woody Allen (The Whore of Mensa) along with a huge dose of your originality in this retelling. Nice.
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    It is great to have this story back! This is a whirlwind of a start and I am having the same problem I had at the close of the previous book. You have so many characters and relationships that it would be helpful to have a cast of characters or genogram of some sort to help us (well me) concentrate on the story rather that constantly try to remember who is who, who is related to who and who is doing who (sorry about that last one.) Whether you provide that or not, you have a follower here.
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    The Ball

    starboardtack commented on Richie Tennyson's story chapter in The Ball

    I started thinking that I would read a chapter or two, it would become formulaic and predictable, and I would quit. Just the opposite has happened— I am utterly hooked. This is a jewel, an unexpected delight! Each scene is fresh, crisp, and intriguing. The twists and turns are brilliant. Great imagination and great writing.
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    There is a touch of Piers Anthony’s “Crewel Lye — A Caustic Yarn” about this: The way the frames are reshaped, cracked or fractured. This is fun.
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    Chapter 15

    starboardtack commented on MozLover21's story chapter in Chapter 15

    Great — love how it is all unraveling
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    HOT! With a twist lol!
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    I sense an interesting back story here for Hank. How long are you going to make us wait. LOL
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    Revolving Doors

    starboardtack commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Revolving Doors

    A soap within a soap withing a .... Hysterical
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    Late Lunch

    starboardtack commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Late Lunch

    Good as far as it went but It is going to take more to each chapter to keep me coming back.
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    It seems there still is one more shoe to drop, so to speak: Ethan and Conner -- the south Florida boys Simon was watching. Any surprises in store there?
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    I. Hate. Cliffhangers. LOL. ❤️
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    Chapter 11

    starboardtack commented on RichEisbrouch's story chapter in Chapter 11

    I loved the dialogue in the chapter. Sharp, witty, with a good rhythm.
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    One hell of a start! Looking forward to seeing what you do with this.
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