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    AC Benus
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  • 05/23/2016
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One Hundred and Fifty-Five Sonnets - 14. cliché…?

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Sonnet No. 27

 

To think that you in your sadness welter –

As if through it you had to go alone,

When all the time I would provide shelter –

Makes me wail like a penitent's atone.

You think of yourself as a two-wheeled cart

Where one axle is resting on the ground,

And the more you pull the more it will start

To scrape and cry and make a terrible sound.

But what you don't know, what you do not feel,

Is me on the other end lifting up,

Like a mother hefting a car of steel,

So that her trapped child can crawl and get up.

If you trust me, I will halve your burden,

So you'll never have to wallow again.

 

 

Sonnet No. 28

 

How I long to create the simple phrase –

"Compare thee to a Summer's Day," or then

"Some Glory their Birth; Some their Skill" amaze –

So that all can know I love you from my pen.

I long to draft that perfect line they will

Quote and read and whisper to their loved one

In all attempt serious to fulfill

The debt of love their beloved has begun.

In some time with "Those Darling Buds of May"

Other eyes and other hearts will quote you

As dimly reflected in what I say,

In my attempts to render you life-true.

Better than any Summer's day will be,

The future that quotes my dear love of thee.

 

 

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Parker Owens

In each of these, you write as if you speak directly to me. I feel as if you have written these to make my heart hear them. This is an incredible gift, and these two sonnets are the fruit of your talents...and we are all the richer...at least, I feel that way!

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Mikiesboy

Parker is right. These are gifts and while you long to create a perfect line, you miss the fact that your sonnets are truly treasures.
These are beautiful, heart felt testaments of the love you felt for this very very lucky man.
tim

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skinnydragon

Two love poems from two different perspectives, each a cliché?

 

Sorry, that's about as far as I dare allow my un-poetic mind wander into these without causing damage.

 

But I did love them. No damage there!

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On 05/24/2016 07:07 AM, Parker Owens said:

In each of these, you write as if you speak directly to me. I feel as if you have written these to make my heart hear them. This is an incredible gift, and these two sonnets are the fruit of your talents...and we are all the richer...at least, I feel that way!

That's a very fine and beautiful compliment, Parker. Thank you. That's how I feel when I read the W. H. Sonnets, so that's awesome feedback.

 

You support always buoys me up, and I am grateful.

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On 05/24/2016 07:17 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Parker is right. These are gifts and while you long to create a perfect line, you miss the fact that your sonnets are truly treasures.

These are beautiful, heart felt testaments of the love you felt for this very very lucky man.

tim

Thanks for a great review, Tim. Writing is hard work, and perfection seems only an illusion, but we must press on (if that is our goal). I think you get that, and I thank you again for your encouragement and support of my efforts. :)

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On 05/24/2016 08:13 AM, skinnydragon said:

Two love poems from two different perspectives, each a cliché?

 

Sorry, that's about as far as I dare allow my un-poetic mind wander into these without causing damage.

 

But I did love them. No damage there!

You can't fool me, skinny. I know you are fine poet, and GA is blessed with a couple of postings which happily bear that sentiment out. In fact, more poems from you would be a great addition, so please never feel your brain is 'un-poetic': life is poetic!

 

Anyway, thank you! Saying you love them is all the feedback I could hope to receive. Cheers.

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On 05/24/2016 12:33 PM, Valkyrie said:

Lovely, as always, AC. :hug:

Thank you for a lovely review, Valkyrie :yes:

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