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Musings of a Messed Up Mind - 14. Guilt and Falling

Two poems about love and mistakes

Guilt

You admit you did wrong
Finally telling the truth
Things I didn’t want to hear,
but needed to.

A mistake, meant nothing
Familiar words, feelings not
I love you, but you forgot
for that weekend with him.

You didn’t break my heart
But lies angered me
Yet we’ll go on, there
is too much between us.

Your love has sustained me
Lifted and carried me
I won’t abandon it or you,
not for this single misstep.

 

Falling

Snow falls tonight - it's cold
My heart turned from you
Briefly
You ask, may I touch you?
I cannot say no to you
As I watch the flakes glitter
I fall back in love with you

Thank you for reading.
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Both beautiful Musings, Tim. I am especially touched by Falling. I can imagine what you write so clearly. I see and touch and feel through your words. Thank you for these

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Hey tim

 

Strong emotions in both Guilt and Falling. Two poems that tell amazing stories of a love so strong that it can crack but never break.

 

As always, nicely done :)

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The exasperation in the beginning of Guilt, ends on a somewhat forgiving note. 'I won't abandon it or you.' Any leftover resentment is tempered in Falling. 'I cannot say no to you. ----- I fall back in love with you.' It's impossible not to feel or relate to the emotion layered in the two pieces.

 

Great job Tim, as always.

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Wonderful writing Tim.
It is a complete story: Discovery, disappointment, acceptance and, in Falling, forgiveness.

 

Nicely done Tim. Thanks for sharing.

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You're good. The subject matter's not my cup of tea, I shy away from darkness and sadness. Yet I keep coming back to you. You're that good of a writer. I'm left wanting to cradle the narrator in my arms, wanting to make the pain go away.

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On 11/24/2015 01:58 PM, Parker Owens said:

Both beautiful Musings, Tim. I am especially touched by Falling. I can imagine what you write so clearly. I see and touch and feel through your words. Thank you for these

Thanks Parker. Glad they worked for you... appreciate your support and comments..

 

tim

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On 11/24/2015 02:32 PM, Reader1810 said:

Hey tim

 

Strong emotions in both Guilt and Falling. Two poems that tell amazing stories of a love so strong that it can crack but never break.

 

As always, nicely done :)

Hi Reader.. not break but it was tested. Thanks for your support and for reading these.

 

tim

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On 11/24/2015 02:48 PM, Defiance19 said:

The exasperation in the beginning of Guilt, ends on a somewhat forgiving note. 'I won't abandon it or you.' Any leftover resentment is tempered in Falling. 'I cannot say no to you. ----- I fall back in love with you.' It's impossible not to feel or relate to the emotion layered in the two pieces.

 

Great job Tim, as always.

Hey Def thanks so much. I appreciate you reading these and your comments... tim

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On 11/24/2015 03:24 PM, skinnydragon said:

Wonderful writing Tim.

It is a complete story: Discovery, disappointment, acceptance and, in Falling, forgiveness.

 

Nicely done Tim. Thanks for sharing.

Hey SD!! Thank you very much. Yeah I guess it is, I guess maybe I should have put them in with No Joy.. they are all sort of in the same family. Thanks again,

 

tim

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On 11/24/2015 10:21 PM, R J Drew said:

Guilt shows the power of forgiveness. Very touching.

Hi RJ! Thanks so much for reading and for your thoughtful comments. There's a cost to guilt, but I think there's a cost to forgive as well. Thanks

 

tim

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On 11/24/2015 10:59 PM, Carlos Hazday said:

You're good. The subject matter's not my cup of tea, I shy away from darkness and sadness. Yet I keep coming back to you. You're that good of a writer. I'm left wanting to cradle the narrator in my arms, wanting to make the pain go away.

Carols! Thanks for the compliments and for coming back. Believe me the narrator would have taken those hugs!! I appreciate you reading and your kind comments. Something cheerier is bound to show up soon... tim xo

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On 11/25/2015 04:44 AM, Headstall said:

Terrific poems, Tim. Exquisitely wrought.

Thanks Gary... I appreciate you reading them.

 

tim

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Definitely capturing those special moments tugging at our hearts. As I said to Gary, I am really enjoying exploring poetry again. You have given us something worth reading

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On 11/25/2015 04:29 PM, Bucket1 said:

Definitely capturing those special moments tugging at our hearts. As I said to Gary, I am really enjoying exploring poetry again. You have given us something worth reading

Sorry I'm late ... I'm glad you're reading poetry again. I like it. Like to take AC's challenge prompts he puts together. Hard as they are..you might find it fun to read them and the results. Rhyming couplets are next..man! Thanks B! For your support! tim

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