Kansas Encounters of the Close Kind by Mark Arbour

[Graeme]

Kansas Encounters of the Close Kind by Mark Arbour

 

Taking chances. Breaking commitments.

 

 

:nuke: :nuke: Spoilers Below!!! :nuke: :nuke:

Edited September 12, 2010 by Graeme

[Zeoanne]

What a sensual story you've written here babe! The descriptive played like a scene of a movie in my head. When I was half way reading, I thought at the end you'd have us realize that these two were actual lovers who have made plans to meet at the park, then was sad to see that there was not going to be a second encounter, but oh well.... Life goes on.

Fabulous! When the list of stories was first posted at first I read Kansas then read again and saw Kanas and wondered if that was a misspell... it was. Thanks for sharing!

[Graeme]

Sorry, the typo was by me -- now fixed (the index page will be fixed shortly)

Edited September 12, 2010 by Graeme

[Mark Arbour]

What a sensual story you've written here babe! The descriptive played like a scene of a movie in my head. When I was half way reading, I thought at the end you'd have us realize that these two were actual lovers who have made plans to meet at the park, then was sad to see that there was not going to be a second encounter, but oh well.... Life goes on.

Fabulous! When the list of stories was first posted at first I read Kansas then read again and saw Kanas and wondered if that was a misspell... it was. Thanks for sharing!

 

Thanks! I wanted to try something different..second person..and the anthologies present a good chance to experiment.

[Conner]

Excellent play on the theme for this anthology..."no going back" juxtapositioned to "going back".

 

This soldier would have left a smile on my face as well.

 

Superb story, superbly told.

[Mark Arbour]

Excellent play on the theme for this anthology..."no going back" juxtapositioned to "going back".

 

This soldier would have left a smile on my face as well.

 

Superb story, superbly told.

 

Thanks Conner. I'm so glad you picked up on what I was trying to do. After I wrote it, I thought about whether I wanted to post it. It was different, strange, and in second person. But like I said, Anthologies are fun places to experiment.

[Cia]

Well I got what I expected from you Mark, sex in a story. But using second person was interesting, almost as if we are getting to listen to the voice in the main character's head. That gave this short story an intimate feel very quickly. Army man was an dual character, a mix of alpha male and young man. I got the sense that the main character was older from certain lines such as, You think that

[Nephylim]

Honest. Yes, that's the right word Cia, absolutely. The story was honest. I agree that anthologies are an excellent place to experiment and I hope that now you have experimented with second person you will give us some more as I really liked it.

[Libby Drew]

Always a pleasure to read your stuff, Mark. Loved the gritty reality of this against the second person POV. No names, nothing extaneous, yet very intimate.

 

Thanks for sharing. It's been too long since I indulged in one of your stories.

[Mark Arbour]

Why thank you ladies!

 

And great to hear from you Libby! Where have you been hiding?

[Libby Drew]

Why thank you ladies!

 

And great to hear from you Libby! Where have you been hiding?

 

Running myself ragged and leaving far too little time for treats like this. I've decided I'm going to avoid all my responsibilities tonight and curl up with some good reads.

[Kev de Cauchery]

Hot read. And sensual exactly.

 

Hmm. Love the second person POV. Was writing one myself.

 

Would love the idea of Rush that they were actually lovers. But then..

 

Sometimes when you go back though, you don't go back with the same self. That's what I got from this, kinda.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

(How about finding us a map as of where are the tops and bottoms in the States? It seems to me Kansas would be a place for tops on the list. )

 

 

[Mark Arbour]

Hot read. And sensual exactly.

 

Hmm. Love the second person POV. Was writing one myself.

 

Would love the idea of Rush that they were actually lovers. But then..

 

Sometimes when you go back though, you don't go back with the same self. That's what I got from this, kinda.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

(How about finding us a map as of where are the tops and bottoms in the States? It seems to me Kansas would be a place for tops on the list. )

 

 

 

Thanks Kevin. I'm not sure how many Portuguese guys there are in Kansas though.

[Toast]

Thanks for your story. I wonder was this a first time for both of them. All the doubts and crossing lines from the man searching for something. The gentleness of the soldier. Very well written.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Mark,

 

Being the prudish sort that I am - sorry but I am, can't help it - I shy away from sex scenes, BUT this was well done - I only cringed a few times instead of my usual half dozen then clicking away .

 

The ending was really well done - as John Stewart would say - "Nailed it!"

 

Too often authors wrap up by explaining everything to the last detail - lump me in there minus the author title. So I left thinking about this. Thanks

 

Andy

[Mark Arbour]

Thanks for your story. I wonder was this a first time for both of them. All the doubts and crossing lines from the man searching for something. The gentleness of the soldier. Very well written.

 

 

Thank you!

 

Mark,

 

Being the prudish sort that I am - sorry but I am, can't help it - I shy away from sex scenes, BUT this was well done - I only cringed a few times instead of my usual half dozen then clicking away .

 

The ending was really well done - as John Stewart would say - "Nailed it!"

 

Too often authors wrap up by explaining everything to the last detail - lump me in there minus the author title. So I left thinking about this. Thanks

 

Andy

 

I'm glad you like it. Personally, I don't think that my anthology works are my best, because I tend to play around with them and they're usually a little strange.

[Andrew Q Gordon]

Mark,

 

I lobbed in a cream puff of a pitch for you to hit out of the park [my being a prude] and you whiffed on it totally.

 

Are you okay? Do I need to road trip to Missouri to check up on you?

[Mark Arbour]

Mark,

 

I lobbed in a cream puff of a pitch for you to hit out of the park [my being a prude] and you whiffed on it totally.

 

Are you okay? Do I need to road trip to Missouri to check up on you?

 

I'm tempted to tell you that I'm not OK and that you definitely need to road trip to Missouri.

 

What's not prudish about you? Hell, you're practically a Dad, and you get nervous jacking off on command. What kind of gay guy can't do that?

[C James]

So how did you like second person? I've tried it all of once (also in an anthology, a short story called "Requiem".) I went for a formal, archaic style, and I had very mixed reviews; some loved it, some hated it.

 

I liked your use of 2nd; very well done IMHO.

 

BTW, the bridge was the closest to the description I could find in Kansas, but it is from Kansas.

[Mark Arbour]

So how did you like second person? I've tried it all of once (also in an anthology, a short story called "Requiem".) I went for a formal, archaic style, and I had very mixed reviews; some loved it, some hated it.

 

I liked your use of 2nd; very well done IMHO.

 

BTW, the bridge was the closest to the description I could find in Kansas, but it is from Kansas.

 

It was a great pic! I was trying to find a non-porn picture with a hot guy and his pick-up, but ran out of time.

 

Second-person was an interesting experience; I'm glad you liked it. I found it kind of strange to write, because I was basically telling the reader what to think.

[Mark M]

what a different side of you, i didn't know you were this sensual.......pfft yes i did. Now lets get back to CAP or HMS anytime!!!!

 

 

 

 

oh and i supppose i should make a somewhat understandable comment on this criticaly different story. <<<to many big words for me..i think>>> it was fanf***ingtastic. There's another one of them dam big words....how do i do it.

[Tiger]

Interesting story. I have to admit that I've always been fascinated with soldiers. I think it's a fantasy that everyone has, though in my fantasy it goes a bit further. Anyway, great story, Mark. I normally don't like 2nd person, but it is well written!

[Canuk]

oh and i supppose i should make a somewhat understandable comment on this criticaly different story. <<<to many big words for me..i think>>> it was fanf***ingtastic. There's another one of them dam big words....how do i do it.

 

 

because Mark M, you have a the same way with words as you do with the other, more sensual, part of your life !

 

Perhaps long association with Mark 's sensuality has rubbed off (or on, as the case may be.....)

Edited September 20, 2010 by Canuk

[Mark Arbour]

what a different side of you, i didn't know you were this sensual.......pfft yes i did. Now lets get back to CAP or HMS anytime!!!!

 

 

 

 

oh and i supppose i should make a somewhat understandable comment on this criticaly different story. <<<to many big words for me..i think>>> it was fanf***ingtastic. There's another one of them dam big words....how do i do it.

 

 

And so a chapter was posted.

 

Interesting story. I have to admit that I've always been fascinated with soldiers. I think it's a fantasy that everyone has, though in my fantasy it goes a bit further. Anyway, great story, Mark. I normally don't like 2nd person, but it is well written!

 

 

Perhaps your fantasy can work it's way into a story? That I want to read.

 

I'm glad you liked it.

 

because Mark M, you have a the same way with words as you do with the other, more sensual, part of your life !

 

Perhaps long association with Mark 's sensuality has rubbed off (or on, as the case may be.....)

 

I'll rub on anything he wants me too.