' Live-Poets Society ' – A Corner For Poetry

[Mikiesboy]

Here my response to a little fun challenge from Parker... 

[Former Member]

Here my response to a little fun challenge from Parker... 

It's beautifully done, Tim!

[Mikiesboy]

It's beautifully done, Tim!

Aw thanks AC .. it was kinda fun to do this.  A challenge.. had to think about it for a couple of days. 

Edited March 20, 2016 by Mikiesboy

[Parker Owens]

Tim's take on that line was so well done! Loved it!

 

You can find my offering on the same line here...https://www.gayauthors.org/story/parker-owens/occasionalpoetry/18

[Former Member]

Tim's take on that line was so well done! Loved it!

 

You can find my offering on the same line here...https://www.gayauthors.org/story/parker-owens/occasionalpoetry/18

Yours is amazing too, Parker. I left you a review (and will be back here to 'like' when I have some again )

[skinnydragon]

They are each such an interesting take on the line. I thoroughly enjoyed them both.

 

I'm not referring to the poetry, for which I have no credible comments, but the two stunningly different directions the line leads.

 

Good going guys. An interesting concept.

[Emi GS]

Here my response to a little fun challenge from Parker...

Tim's take on that line was so well done! Loved it!

You can find my offering on the same line here...https://www.gayauthors.org/story/parker-owens/occasionalpoetry/18

They are beautiful poems guys. Indeed they were two different paths of love, but you both done some great job on them...

 

I Loved them both...

[dughlas]

I too think them grand. Reading the direction in which each of you went from the same start emphasizes the differences in meaning and understanding that two people can find in the same words. It's little wonder that two readers may find differing interpretation in the same poem. Kudos to you both.

[Mikiesboy]

I too think them grand. Reading the direction in which each of you went from the same start emphasizes the differences in meaning and understanding that two people can find in the same words. It's little wonder that two readers may find differing interpretation in the same poem. Kudos to you both.

Thanks dugh, to be honest when I first read the line, I thought, ugh! But not being good at saying no, I thought oookay. It's interesting what we both came up with. Thanks for reading them! Edited March 21, 2016 by Mikiesboy

[Former Member]

Recently we have had some brilliant 'math' poems by Drew and Parker (and before that I posted my "Ode to a Polynomial"), so I thought I would bring your attention to another one.

 

This is one of my all-time favorite poems, and Holmes was a major source of inspiration when I was a formative, budding young poet. I have never failed to read this poem and be swept up in all the glorious 'Sting Theory,' 'Butterfly Effect,' 'Chaos Theory' implications of the poem. It's like alternate universes can be reduced, admired and tapped into through the Golden Means – the heart of Pi – and the our minds tracing the outline of the Fibonacci Sequence.

 

Enjoy!

            

 

 

The Chambered Nautilus

by Oliver Wendell Holmes

 

 

This is the ship of pearl, which, poets feign,

   Sails the unshadowed main – 

   The venturous bark that flings

On the sweet summer wind its purpled wings

In gulfs enchanted, where the Siren sings,

   And coral reefs lie bare,

Where the cold sea-maids rise to sun their streaming hair.

 

Its webs of living gauze no more unfurl;

   Wrecked is the ship of pearl!

   And every chambered cell,

Where its dim dreaming life was wont to dwell,

As the frail tenant shaped his growing shell,

   Before thee lies revealed – 

Its irised ceiling rent, its sunless crypt unsealed!

 

Year after year beheld the silent toil

   That spread his lustrous coil;

   Still, as the spiral grew,

He left the past year’s dwelling for the new,

Stole with soft step its shining archway through,

   Built up its idle door,

Stretched in his last-found home, and knew the old no more.

 

Thanks for the heavenly message brought by thee,

   Child of the wandering sea,

   Cast from her lap, forlorn!

From thy dead lips a clearer note is born

Than ever Triton blew from wreathèd horn!

   While on mine ear it rings,

Through the deep caves of thought I hear a voice that sings – 

 

Build thee more stately mansions, O my soul,

   As the swift seasons roll!

   Leave thy low-vaulted past!

Let each new temple, nobler than the last,

Shut thee from heaven with a dome more vast,

   Till thou at length art free,

Leaving thine outgrown shell by life’s unresting sea!

Edited March 25, 2016 by AC Benus

[Mikiesboy]

Recently we have had some brilliant 'math' poems by Drew and Parker (and before that I posted my "Ode to a Polynomial"), so I thought I would bring your attention to another one.

 

This is one of my all-time favorite poems, and Holmes was a major source of inspiration when I was a formative, budding young poet. I have never failed to read this poem and be swept up in all the glorious 'Sting Theory,' 'Butterfly Effect,' 'Chaos Theory' implications of the poem. It's like alternate universes can be reduced, admired and tapped into through the Golden Means – the heart of Pi – and the our minds tracing the outline of the Fibonacci Sequence.

 

Enjoy!

            

 

 

 

The Chambered Nautilus

by Oliver Wendell Holmes

 

 

This is the ship of pearl, which, poets feign,

   Sails the unshadowed main – 

   The venturous bark that flings

On the sweet summer wind its purpled wings

In gulfs enchanted, where the Siren sings,

   And coral reefs lie bare,

Where the cold sea-maids rise to sun their streaming hair.

 

Its webs of living gauze no more unfurl;

   Wrecked is the ship of pearl!

   And every chambered cell,

Where its dim dreaming life was wont to dwell,

As the frail tenant shaped his growing shell,

   Before thee lies revealed – 

Its irised ceiling rent, its sunless crypt unsealed!

 

Year after year beheld the silent toil

   That spread his lustrous coil;

   Still, as the spiral grew,

He left the past year’s dwelling for the new,

Stole with soft step its shining archway through,

   Built up its idle door,

Stretched in his last-found home, and knew the old no more.

 

Thanks for the heavenly message brought by thee,

   Child of the wandering sea,

   Cast from her lap, forlorn!

From thy dead lips a clearer note is born

Than ever Triton blew from wreathèd horn!

   While on mine ear it rings,

Through the deep caves of thought I hear a voice that sings – 

 

Build thee more stately mansions, O my soul,

   As the swift seasons roll!

   Leave thy low-vaulted past!

Let each new temple, nobler than the last,

Shut thee from heaven with a dome more vast,

   Till thou at length art free,

Leaving thine outgrown shell by life’s unresting sea!

Oh, I really like this. I think I'll look at more of Holms' poems. Thanks for sharing this AC!!

[dughlas]

It's nearly 45 years that I last read these words. Thank you AC for a glimpsed memory from a time long passed.

[Drew Espinosa]

Recently we have had some brilliant 'math' poems by Drew and Parker (and before that I posted my "Ode to a Polynomial"), so I thought I would bring your attention to another one.

 

This is one of my all-time favorite poems, and Holmes was a major source of inspiration when I was a formative, budding young poet. I have never failed to read this poem and be swept up in all the glorious 'Sting Theory,' 'Butterfly Effect,' 'Chaos Theory' implications of the poem. It's like alternate universes can be reduced, admired and tapped into through the Golden Means – the heart of Pi – and the our minds tracing the outline of the Fibonacci Sequence.

 

Enjoy!

Why am I out of likes? LOL, this is an amazing poem AC, thank you for highlighting Holmes, I'll be checking out more of his work

[Defiance19]

Swept up indeed.. It is a majestic poem especially read out loud.. Thanks AC.. And now I too will have to find more by Holmes.. 

[Former Member]

Reading about Holmes last night, I was surprised to learn that nearly all of his poetry was written and published while he was still in college. A true genius, he turned his attention to medicine and the law thereafter. 

 

 

Edited March 25, 2016 by AC Benus

[Former Member]

It's nearly 45 years that I last read these words. Thank you AC for a glimpsed memory from a time long passed.

Thanks, Dugh. I should post a few more of the ones I felt drawn to as a young man.

 

I still have the little volume that I lay in bed with my first boyfriend and recited for him. My post-it notes from way back then are still affixed.   

[Mikiesboy]

Thanks, Dugh. I should post a few more of the ones I felt drawn to as a young man.

 

I still have the little volume that I lay in bed with my first boyfriend and recited for him. My post-it notes from way back then are still affixed.   

Oh that's such a beautiful story!

[Former Member]

Why am I out of likes? LOL, this is an amazing poem AC, thank you for highlighting Holmes, I'll be checking out more of his work

Thanks, Drew. Holmes wrote "Old Ironsides" and saved the USS Constitution from the wrecking ball. 

[dughlas]

Thanks, Dugh. I should post a few more of the ones I felt drawn to as a young man.

 

I still have the little volume that I lay in bed with my first boyfriend and recited for him. My post-it notes from way back then are still affixed.

 

It is oft small things that spoke to our souls that provide the most cherished memories.

[Former Member]

It is oft small things that spoke to our souls that provide the most cherished memories.

So true, and beautifully stated.

Swept up indeed.. It is a majestic poem especially read out loud.. Thanks AC.. And now I too will have to find more by Holmes.. 

Thanks, Defiance19! On one of the post-its I mentioned to Dugh is this little saying I jotted down when I was about 20:

 

"You can give yourself to God

only if you give yourself to your brothers."

 

I rather like that   

Edited March 26, 2016 by AC Benus

[dughlas]

Ohhhh, that is loving and lovely.

[Mikiesboy]

Weeee .. ok. I wrote a couple of Italian sonnets... ugh. They were WORK!!  And I think it shows in my attempts...

[dughlas]

Weeee .. ok. I wrote a couple of Italian sonnets... ugh. They were WORK!!  And I think it shows in my attempts...

Having read them I can truthfully say I admire your efforts. As I said in my review I'm to lazy for this. Ties my brain in to knots. So my compliments for the effort but also for the words themselves. I am curious to see what others write in their reviews. The first, I think is rather clear but the second has subtle underlayments and I think will bring different things to each reader. Nice work.

[Former Member]

Weeee .. ok. I wrote a couple of Italian sonnets... ugh. They were WORK!!  And I think it shows in my attempts...

Brilliant! Reading them, it's hard to fathom that these are your first forays into the form. When I think back to my first attempts at Italian Sonnets, I shudder in embarrassment. You have nothing to be shy about with these two poems; very well done!   

[Former Member]

Having read them I can truthfully say I admire your efforts. As I said in my review I'm to lazy for this. Ties my brain in to knots. So my compliments for the effort but also for the words themselves. I am curious to see what others write in their reviews. The first, I think is rather clear but the second has subtle underlayments and I think will bring different things to each reader. Nice work.

I agree with your comments on the complexity of the second one. To reveal a bit the 'behind the scenes' action, our poet was a little unsure, but I reassure him the relationship between the quatrains and sestet was a fascinating one. I love that poem, and different people will get different things from it.  

Edited March 26, 2016 by AC Benus