Emi GS Posted March 9, 2016 Share Posted March 9, 2016 Hello EveryOne... Ok, here I got My First Anthology Entry and one and only Antho in Poetry has been published finally. I hope you guys will like it... https://www.gayauthors.org/story/the-eminent-mgk/m_m_mgk 1 Link to comment
Parker Owens Posted March 9, 2016 Share Posted March 9, 2016 Huzzah, Emi! Well done! 2 Link to comment
Headstall Posted March 9, 2016 Share Posted March 9, 2016 Hello EveryOne... Ok, here I got My First Anthology Entry and one and only Antho in Poetry has been published finally. I hope you guys will like it... https://www.gayauthors.org/story/the-eminent-mgk/m_m_mgk Read it, and reviewed... I was really touched, my friend. Your last line was beautiful.... 2 Link to comment
Emi GS Posted March 9, 2016 Share Posted March 9, 2016 Huzzah, Emi! Well done! Thank You so much for the great Reviews Parker... Read it, and reviewed... I was really touched, my friend. Your last line was beautiful.... Thank You for spending your time to read and review, Gary. I am glad you liked those little poems... 2 Link to comment
Drew Espinosa Posted March 9, 2016 Share Posted March 9, 2016 Hey y'all I know I haven't been here in a while, but I wanna let y'all jbow that I'll be posting a couple of poems this weekend. 1 Link to comment
Emi GS Posted March 9, 2016 Share Posted March 9, 2016 Hey y'all I know I haven't been here in a while, but I wanna let y'all jbow that I'll be posting a couple of poems this weekend. Yay... Good to hear MyLove. I'll be waiting for those... 1 Link to comment
Parker Owens Posted March 9, 2016 Share Posted March 9, 2016 Hey y'all I know I haven't been here in a while, but I wanna let y'all jbow that I'll be posting a couple of poems this weekend. Excellent. Looking forward to it! 1 Link to comment
Doctor Oger Posted March 9, 2016 Share Posted March 9, 2016 (edited) @ Doc: I could do that. No objections to salted slime, then? @ Tim: Oh. my. Goodness. Words failed me....and that's saying something... It's your text. Your choice of words. Yours. Why would I object to that? Edited March 9, 2016 by Doctor Oger 1 Link to comment
AC Benus Posted March 11, 2016 Author Share Posted March 11, 2016 Hello EveryOne... Ok, here I got My First Anthology Entry and one and only Antho in Poetry has been published finally. I hope you guys will like it... https://www.gayauthors.org/story/the-eminent-mgk/m_m_mgk These are lovely poems, Emi! 3 Link to comment
AC Benus Posted March 11, 2016 Author Share Posted March 11, 2016 (edited) I've been typing up my old (OLD) poems. What do you all think of this one...? Like a song that wove itself into a soul Like a glance that set into a mood these are the abstract thoughts that express what I feel Edited March 11, 2016 by AC Benus 3 Link to comment
Emi GS Posted March 12, 2016 Share Posted March 12, 2016 (edited) These are lovely poems, Emi!@Ben: Every time I write something(poetry), I'd wait what the Big Guy going to say. I Love your reviews that much. They show expertise, give a lot of support and suggestions. Even sometimes I'll be eagerly wait for the long run too, to know what you think. Thank You for those Amazing reviews and you have made my day. I think, I'd be smiling all day today. For that, Thank You so much Ben... @Tim2: I really appreciate all those reviews of your and I am glad you liked them. Thank You for such a Lovely reviews Tim. They boosted my spirit... Edited March 12, 2016 by The Eminent MGK 2 Link to comment
Emi GS Posted March 12, 2016 Share Posted March 12, 2016 I've been typing up my old (OLD) poems. What do you all think of this one...? Like a song that wove itself into a soul Like a glance that set into a mood these are the abstract thoughts that express what I feel As a reader I just enjoyed that poem. Expressing our feeling in those small lines is not that easy. Those lines are just great. I can feel through those... 2 Link to comment
Parker Owens Posted March 12, 2016 Share Posted March 12, 2016 I've been typing up my old (OLD) poems. What do you all think of this one...? Like a song that wove itself into a soul Like a glance that set into a mood these are the abstract thoughts that express what I feel You had me at the first line. A song weaving itself into a soul is a powerful image that could drive many a poem or story. Then the next line reinforces the notion...so yes, this is compelling to me. 2 Link to comment
Mikiesboy Posted March 12, 2016 Share Posted March 12, 2016 @Ben: Every time I write something(poetry), I'd wait what the Big Guy going to say. I Love your reviews that much. They show expertise, give a lot of support and suggestions. Even sometimes I'll be eagerly wait for the long run too, to know what you think. Thank You for those Amazing reviews and you have made my day. I think, I'd be smiling all day today. For that, Thank You so much Ben... @Tim2: I really appreciate all those reviews of your and I am glad you liked them. Thank You for such a Lovely reviews Tim. They boosted my spirit... I think you did a terrific job Emi, seriously. 3 Link to comment
Mikiesboy Posted March 12, 2016 Share Posted March 12, 2016 I've been typing up my old (OLD) poems. What do you all think of this one...? Like a song that wove itself into a soul Like a glance that set into a mood these are the abstract thoughts that express what I feel To me AC, this is you.. a weaver, a singer with your pen. So often your words have moved me to tears, touched me deeply. So you do weave words and shape them into people and places and feelings. And they settle on the page until some one reads them and they are more than just abstract, they become real; like the wind in the desert. 3 Link to comment
Emi GS Posted March 12, 2016 Share Posted March 12, 2016 I think you did a terrific job Emi, seriously. Thank You so much Tim. And I Proud, really proud of Myself right now... 2 Link to comment
Mikiesboy Posted March 12, 2016 Share Posted March 12, 2016 Thank You so much Tim. And I Proud, really proud of Myself right now... :heart: Sorry no likes buddy. I'm glad, you should be. 2 Link to comment
Emi GS Posted March 12, 2016 Share Posted March 12, 2016 :heart: Sorry no likes buddy. I'm glad, you should be. Its fine, don't worry. And I have... 1 Link to comment
Emi GS Posted March 12, 2016 Share Posted March 12, 2016 Ok as I planned I had re-written the Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyum style... You came to me, Love, from a nameless pole, brought the joy, brought the zeal; never 'rived sole. Never stopped kissing me, nor to bliss me. Oh! God's delightful angel; clasp my soul. What do you think about it guys... 2 Link to comment
AC Benus Posted March 12, 2016 Author Share Posted March 12, 2016 Ok as I planned I had re-written the Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyum style... You came to me, Love, from a nameless pole, brought the joy, brought the zeal; never 'rived sole. Never stopped kissing me, nor to bliss me. Oh! God's delightful angel; clasp my soul. What do you think about it guys... Emi, what does 'rived sole mean...? Link to comment
AC Benus Posted March 12, 2016 Author Share Posted March 12, 2016 To me AC, this is you.. a weaver, a singer with your pen. So often your words have moved me to tears, touched me deeply. So you do weave words and shape them into people and places and feelings. And they settle on the page until some one reads them and they are more than just abstract, they become real; like the wind in the desert. Your comments are sheer poetry! Thank you humbly 2 Link to comment
AC Benus Posted March 12, 2016 Author Share Posted March 12, 2016 @Ben: Every time I write something(poetry), I'd wait what the Big Guy going to say. I Love your reviews that much. They show expertise, give a lot of support and suggestions. Even sometimes I'll be eagerly wait for the long run too, to know what you think. Thank You for those Amazing reviews and you have made my day. I think, I'd be smiling all day today. For that, Thank You so much Ben... Emi, thank you for your touching words. I appreciate them; and thank you for all of your feedback too 2 Link to comment
AC Benus Posted March 12, 2016 Author Share Posted March 12, 2016 You had me at the first line. A song weaving itself into a soul is a powerful image that could drive many a poem or story. Then the next line reinforces the notion...so yes, this is compelling to me. Thank you for your comments, Parker. For me the process of typing up all of my old poetry is not very fun. Most of the poems 'mean' something to me only in how they remind me of the way I felt when I was 19 or 20, and put me in a bad place. Few of them I read and feel engaged by, but this one I posted because it spoke to me. I think it's lovely, and it shows some potential of the poet I would slowly become Thanks again. Link to comment
AC Benus Posted March 12, 2016 Author Share Posted March 12, 2016 (edited) As a reader I just enjoyed that poem. Expressing our feeling in those small lines is not that easy. Those lines are just great. I can feel through those... Thank you, Emi, for a lovely set of comments. Reading it again now, I wonder if you (or any one of our Live-Poets) think I should change the tense of the first two lines to match the last two…? Thus: Like a song that weaves itself into a soul Like a glance that sets into a mood these are the abstract thoughts that express what I feel Maybe that's a more comfortable read…? Edited March 12, 2016 by AC Benus 1 Link to comment
Parker Owens Posted March 13, 2016 Share Posted March 13, 2016 Thank you, Emi, for a lovely set of comments. Reading it again now, I wonder if you (or any one of our Live-Poets) think I should change the tense of the first two lines to match the last two…? Thus: Like a song that weaves itself into a soul Like a glance that sets into a mood these are the abstract thoughts that express what I feel Maybe that's a more comfortable read…? I agree this is subtly more comfortable, without diminishing the power of the original image... 1 Link to comment
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