The Promise by Mikiesboy

[Brayon]

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Edited May 12, 2018 by BHopper2

[Brayon]

A very interesting start to the first chapter. Finn is clearly some sort of playboy from how his apartment is described in the opening scene, and he clearly was wanting Trevor. I agree with what Mike said in the chapter comment, Sam was coming on really strong, and I too was thinking this may end up some sort of Mafia-related type of story.

 

Loved the clear visuals that the chapter had. It was very well done.

[mollyhousemouse]

oh y'all are gonna love this one!

 

[Mikiesboy]

thanks A .. i appreciate it.. it's a very short story ... but we can chat about it .. xoxo 

[Reader1810]

Sam may have come on strong, but something tells me he is a keeper of very important knowledge. Just what that is, I won’t hazard a guess this early, but I’m thinking his ‘long story’ will shed some light on the subject. 

 

Oh, who am I kidding, hypotheses are already rumbling around my brain... 🤔

 

 

Edited May 13, 2018 by Reader1810

[mollyhousemouse]

5 hours ago, BHopper2 said:

Loved the clear visuals that the chapter had. It was very well done.

that's something that tim can really do well, can't he?

you can "see" the apartment, the party, and the garden where young Finn is playing.

 

looking forward to talking with you about this one!

[Reader1810]

it hasn't been twenty-four hours and The Promise is already numero uno on the Top Storie of the Week list! 

 

Woohoo!!  

 

Edited May 13, 2018 by Reader1810

[mollyhousemouse]

4 minutes ago, Reader1810 said:

it hasn't been twenty-four hours and Promises is already numero uno on the Top Storie of the Week list! 

 

Woohoo!!  

 

oh that is good!

thanks for sharing that Reader!

[MichaelS36]

If I was the sulking type, which I'm not, I'd be doing that over not seeing the next chapter. He's got something else he let me read though to hush my complaining. ..it's short. But it's good, and it shows his imagination. ..where this stuff comes from, I do not know. He wrote I guess about 10 years ago...maybe he will post it.

[Kitt]

@MichaelS36

Unfortunately even most authors don't know where it comes from.  I am no author, but I certainly don't know where the prompt responses I post come from.  If I did maybe I could write more than one chapter on an idea!

[mollyhousemouse]

second chapter is up

it somehow made me want a bag of sour gummy worms.....

 

 

[Reader1810]

 

@mollyhousemouse 

 

This chapter has you thinking of gummy worms, but not me. I've loved Jeep Cherokees for what seems like forever. Course, I would never get one, because it would be like driving a tank if I was at the wheel.  

 

PS. Apologies up front for the extra large image - I just like it is all... 

 

[mollyhousemouse]

5 minutes ago, Reader1810 said:

This chapter has you thinking of gummy worms, but not me. I've loved Jeep Cherokees for what seems like forever. Course, I would never get one, because it would be like driving a tank if I was at the wheel.  

i'm a big Jeep fan too @Reader1810!

i love the older CJ7,and the newer Rubicon

but may favorite is the old Jeep Grand Wagoneer!  (same apology as Reader...)

Edited May 19, 2018 by mollyhousemouse

[Reader1810]

Getting back to the story, I wonder what Finn's mom will think of him wanting to take over Sanctuary. Before Sam arrived on the scene - you know, to remind Finn of his promise - what were Finn's feelings toward this home?

 

It seems as if he moved very far away - hence the plane ride to get there, and a multi hour drive - to distance himself from the place. Bad memories of his dad's suicide perhaps? 

[Reader1810]

4 minutes ago, mollyhousemouse said:

I'm a big Jeep fan too @Reader1810!

i love the older CJ7,and the newer Rubicon

but may favorite is the old Jeep Grand Wagoneer!  (same apology as Reader...)

 I like the older models because of the boxey look they have over the curved edges of today.

[mollyhousemouse]

2 minutes ago, Reader1810 said:

Getting back to the story, I wonder what Finn's mom will think of him wanting to take over Sanctuary. Before Sam arrived on the scene - you know, to remind Finn of his promise - what were Finn's feelings toward this home?

 

It seems as if he moved very far away - hence the plane ride to get there, and a multi hour drive - to distance himself from the place. Bad memories of his dad's suicide perhaps? 

those are all interesting questions!

i can't wait to learn more about Sam and his kind too

[mollyhousemouse]

2 minutes ago, Reader1810 said:

 I like the older models because of the boxey look they have over the curved edges of today.

there's a whole mystique and culture around Jeeps

i've seen plenty of tire covers painted with

                    It's a Jeep Thing

[Reader1810]

2 minutes ago, mollyhousemouse said:

those are all interesting questions!

i can't wait to learn more about Sam and his kind too

Yes, and how and why they came to be part of sanctuary. Or, is it Sanctuary because of them? As in, is it their sanctuary and they need humans - certain trusty ones, of course - to be keepers of Sanctuary? 

[mollyhousemouse]

2 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

Yes, and how and why they came to be part of sanctuary. Or, is it Sanctuary because of them? As in, is it their sanctuary and they need humans - certain trusty ones, of course - to be keepers of Sanctuary? 

it promises to be an interesting journey doesn't it Reader?

 

 

 

see what i did there? 

 

Edited May 20, 2018 by mollyhousemouse

[Reader1810]

Just had a thought. Would something bad happen if something happened to Sanctuary?

 

Is there some kind of balance because Sanctuary exists? 

 

So many questions and thoughts and theories are running through my brain. Need a distraction. Perhaps tim has a poem just lying around waiting for air time... No? Oh wells, brain running amok it will have to be.  

 

Edited May 20, 2018 by Reader1810

[Reader1810]

1 minute ago, mollyhousemouse said:

it promises to be in interesting journey doesn't it Reader?

 

 

 

see what i did there? 

 

Yes, yes I did, and yes, it does.  

[Mikiesboy]

  Michael's .. just to keep that image going ...LOL

[mollyhousemouse]

22 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

Michael's .. just to keep that image going ...LOL

nice!

 

[Mikiesboy]

you just need to imagine a tall broad dark-haired guy leaning on it in a tight white tshirt and light blue jeans..  .. hehe

[mollyhousemouse]

4 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

you just need to imagine a tall broad dark-haired guy leaning on it in a tight white tshirt and light blue jeans..  .. hehe

i have a pretty good imagination tim!

Edited May 20, 2018 by mollyhousemouse