Valkyrie
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This story is like a good meal--full of layers of flavor and I keep salivating over the next course! The dance between Ben and Travis has me simultaneously shouting "Get your head out of your ass, Ben" and savoring the tension and anticipation of what's to come. Again, the pace is perfect. You reveal just enough to move the story forward, while piquing our interest and making me want the next chapter now! Very nicely done. Just one minor error stood out to me. You used 'affect' when it should have been 'effect'. Sorry, but I can't remember what paragraph it was in. I look forward to the next chapter!
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Prompts Second Chance Prompts #509 & #511
Valkyrie commented on Renee Stevens's blog entry in Writing World
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Happy Birthday, Sheep! Come back soon! We miss you! I'll even let you have the shiny today
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Happy Birthday, Gary! Lots of great people share this day, you, Lisa, and my mom! Here's an appaloosa cake for you I hope you enjoy it!
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Happy Birthday to an awesome editor and even better friend! I hope you have the day off and are spoiled rotten! Here's an insanely cute dog cake for you Enjoy! :D
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We're thinking of you too, Wayne. I hope things are on an upswing soon.
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The most powerful words of the chapter: I don't hate you anymore. Interesting twist. I'm kind of hoping he'll get seasick. lol
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My brother lives in Colorado and I've been out to visit him twice. Your descriptions bring me back there and make me want to go back. It's beautiful there. I had to laugh at "Treading Water" too, since as Gary said, he has a story of the same name. The scene at the truck was great. I'm really feeling the chemistry between Ben and Travis and have a feeling their relationship is going to be very hot. I love how often you are posting chapters. I'm really enjoying this story so far.
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It's interesting how you show what happened through snippets of memories and questions from Bryan and Audra. So we don't get a first row seat, but have to infer and hope and look to what happens next. The trip to the ranch is going to be quite interesting, I'm sure. I look forward to what's next.
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Your imagery is spot-on for both of these. Like Northie, I also love the 'gaunt-fingered horizon'. It describes my drive to work (along Route 400) perfectly this time of year. Nice job.
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CSR Book Club November C S R Discussion Day: Between The Lines By Comicality
Valkyrie commented on Cia's blog entry in Gay Authors News
Sorry I didn't have a chance to read the story, but I enjoyed the interview. It's always nice to get to know other authors better. -
Sorry you're going through all this. Family issues suck, that's for sure. I hope things are on the upswing soon! In the meantime take care of yourself. There's a lot of people who are willing to help out with whatever needs it.
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Weekly Wrap Up (Nov 20 - Nov 26)
Valkyrie commented on Renee Stevens's blog entry in Gay Authors News
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Thanks so much I was going for a realistic story, so I'm glad it worked. Thanks for the review!
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I agree with Gary (Headstall). I really like your writing style, too. The descriptions are evocative, but not overdone, and I get a real feel of Aspen and the characters. I like the pace, too. You are giving us glimpses into their lives very organically, in a showing vs. telling fashion. You have me eager to read more. It's nice to see that it's fairly well-edited, too. There are a few minor mistakes, but nothing that detracts from the story. I'll just mention one of them that always jumps out at me since I am a speech therapist. "Vocal chords" should be "vocal cords". I look forward to what's next!
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Great beginning! You've really drawn me into the story and I can feel Ben's 'dissonance'. The chapter is well-written with a good pace. I look forward to what's next. Thanks for sharing your story with us.
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Well you did it. You managed to make me feel empathy for the predator. I notice he still doesn't have a name, though. I'm so curious to find out if he'll have one at some point (don't tell me, let me find out on my own ) Somehow I don't think things will be all shiny happy roses for him now, despite his softening heart. Now that things are on the upswing, I'm guessing there will be a downturn and the consequences of his old life will hit him hard. I also don't think we've seen the last of Ted. Great job, Parker. I can't wait to see where you take us next.
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Thanks so much
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Well you didn't leave me a review in 2014, so I'm guessing you missed it. I'm glad you read it now, though. The flu can be quite serious, even though most people are able to fight it off just fine. I've known several people, unfortunately, who were asymptomatic and then diagnosed with end stage cancer. It's very sad. I'm not sure if I'll revisit these guys, although I did enjoy updating their story. One of my plans for the winter is to go through my prompt serials--I've written a few of them--and see which ones are worth cleaning up and posting as their own stories. Thanks for reading and for the review!
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Well you didn't leave me a review in 2014, so I'm guessing you missed it. I'm glad you read it now, though. The flu can be quite serious, even though most people are able to fight it off just fine. I've known several people, unfortunately, who were asymptomatic and then diagnosed with end stage cancer. It's very sad. I'm not sure if I'll revisit these guys, although I did enjoy updating their story. One of my plans for the winter is to go through my prompt serials--I've written a few of them--and see which ones are worth cleaning up and posting as their own stories. Thanks for reading and for the review!
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Awww...thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it.
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Thanks, Tim. Snowmobiles are a must in areas that get a lot of snow. I'm glad you liked it!
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I based Aunt Sheila off of my great-aunt who passed away a couple of years ago. She had dementia and would ask the same questions over and over. I always sat next to her at Thanksgiving or Christmas Eve because I had the patience to respond to her every time. She was a very social lady and loved having the company. I'm glad you had a nice visit yesterday.
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Thanks I'm glad you liked it.
