Moggy's Mutterings - 1. Death

Dark...but very beautiful at the same time. 

As I said before: Great poems!

Although I read these once previously, reading them again this morning brought fresh reactions. Death arriving with a bang, not just quietly sneaking in, is chilling. 

I'm happy that you decided to start posting here, moggy, and I look forward to reading more (because I know you have more!)  - Cheers, Mac

6 hours ago, Lyssa said:

As I said before: Great poems!

thanks, some days the tumble out no matter what

6 hours ago, Mikiesboy said:

Very nice. They are effective and I think you could make them into a single poem easily. Really good moggy!

thanks tim. i did think about it, but decided not to. these were written 48 hours apart while i was watching the lady across the hallway in the rehab center struggle at the end of her life.

5 hours ago, LitLover said:

These are lovely, Moggy.  Dark, yes, but sometimes a little dark is what we feel.  I've really loved other work of yours and this no different.  Congratulations on donning the pink  

thank you. pink is not a color i would not normally pick for myself, but i'm growing to like it

4 hours ago, Bucket1 said:

Yay, you are a poet!!!

and i didn't even know it  thanks, bucket

3 hours ago, Defiance19 said:

As before, Moggy, the subject is dark but these are beautiful.

 

Congrats Poet..

thanks def. better dark poems than dark cookies

3 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

Dark subjects, yes, but very compelling and captivating. I saw Death, yes, I did. Well done, Moggy!  

thanks reader. i hope he didn't scare you.  

You show here, moggy, in these two astounding poems, your ability to convey the visuals while evoking the feelings. That is the mark of a great poet. I am a fan, my friend... Cheers... Gary....

3 hours ago, Caz Pedroso said:

Very powerful, thry create a very clear image.

 

Congrats on posting them and I look forward to more. 

 

 

thanks caz. i really had a clear image the night this happened that lead me to this two poems

2 hours ago, Parker Owens said:

Arresting, forceful images make the reader pay attention and focus. Really well done. 

thank you. it means a lot coming from someone whose stories i like

2 hours ago, AC Benus said:

I agree with everybody: deep, dark and beautiful work here. The compare/contrast from the quiet of the first to the 'roar' of the second is very effective. Still have goosebumps 

thank you. wow, i gave goosebumps to the teacher of poetry. most of my stuff is on the darker side

36 minutes ago, MacGreg said:

Although I read these once previously, reading them again this morning brought fresh reactions. Death arriving with a bang, not just quietly sneaking in, is chilling. 

 

I'm happy that you decided to start posting here, moggy, and I look forward to reading more (because I know you have more!)  - Cheers, Mac

thanks Mac. i wrote them and every time i reread them it moves me back to that night. and of course i have more. lots more.