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    Thorn Wilde
  • Thorn Wilde
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  • 10/09/2014
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Thorny Poetry - 3. Touch

A poem about being close, and far.

I want to touch you

You’re right next to me and I want

To reach over and

Run my fingers through your hair

But you’re too far

 

You said

You can’t sleep if you haven’t got room

You said

That’s why we need such a wide bed

You said

You can’t sleep if I touch you

 

You’re already asleep

If you weren’t I might

Reach

Touch

Hold you for a bit

But you’re asleep

And I don’t want to wake you

Or startle you

 

So I lie here

Longing

And in my sleep I search for you

Roll into the middle of the bed

Closer to you

While you hug the edge of the mattress

I roll into no-man’s land

The buffer zone

While you shy away

In your sleep

 

I’ll just wait

Until tomorrow

Then I’ll touch you

Then I’ll catch you

Maybe

Copyright © 2014 - 2020 Thorn Wilde; All Rights Reserved.
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Lisa

Wow, I can't believe nobody reviewed this.

 

I think this is better than the two before it.

 

It really made me sad. I can feel for both the narrator and the person he wants to touch. I'm just like the person he's in bed with; I want my own space in the bed. But I can also relate to the narrator because it is nice to be able to reach out and touch your loved one (even if for just a little while). I hope he was able to satisfy his craving. =)

 

Terrific poem, Thorn. You really have a way with words. :)

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Thorn Wilde
On 10/11/2014 11:18 AM, Lisa said:
Wow, I can't believe nobody reviewed this.

 

I think this is better than the two before it.

 

It really made me sad. I can feel for both the narrator and the person he wants to touch. I'm just like the person he's in bed with; I want my own space in the bed. But I can also relate to the narrator because it is nice to be able to reach out and touch your loved one (even if for just a little while). I hope he was able to satisfy his craving. =)

 

Terrific poem, Thorn. You really have a way with words. :)

It was definitely the one I wrote the quickest. I couldn't sleep and I was thinking and came up with it. I typed it into word, went over it a couple of times and then posted it. All that considered, I'm very glad you liked it so much. :P Thank you! Your reviews always give me a happy. :)
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Mikiesboy

Feels like there's more to this. It feels like the end of a relationship, physically drawing away from each other - withholding touch. Very sad.
nice job
tim

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Thorn Wilde
On 01/09/2016 06:18 PM, Mikiesboy said:

Feels like there's more to this. It feels like the end of a relationship, physically drawing away from each other - withholding touch. Very sad.

nice job

tim

Thank you so much! As it turns out, that particular relationship did end...

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D.K. Daniels

Provoking prose, I am sorry to hear that such events drew you to write this. Again, if it weren’t for life’s troubles none of us would be writing without some experience of these emotions. This piece encapsulated one of my own breakups that was a long distance relationship. 4 years we shared, and then it was over in the blink of an eye. Though the powerful imagery of being alone in this poem is strikingly beautiful. Thank you :)

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10 hours ago, D.K. Daniels said:

Provoking prose, I am sorry to hear that such events drew you to write this. Again, if it weren’t for life’s troubles none of us would be writing without some experience of these emotions. This piece encapsulated one of my own breakups that was a long distance relationship. 4 years we shared, and then it was over in the blink of an eye. Though the powerful imagery of being alone in this poem is strikingly beautiful. Thank you :)

It's always difficult when a relationship ends, no matter on which end of the ending you are. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for reading it.

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