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    Thorn Wilde
  • Thorn Wilde
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  • 11/25/2018
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Thorny Poetry - 6. Right Here

i said

i could write poetry about your back

the lines and the curves of it

men have written epics about less

 

and you said

that in this world there is a single truth

and nobody knows of it

and then you got out of bed to dress

 

and i was left here staring at the beauty that is you

the beauty that is true

knowing there is nothing i can do

 

every scar tells a story

and i can read them on your wrists

every word is a poem

of all my want and pain and love and you

 

and i know it’s not forever

and i know it isn’t fair

but it’s what we’ve got right now

right here

I wrote this about my ex-girlfriend. It was gonna be a song, but I never quite managed to make it work as one.
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
Note: While authors are asked to place warnings on their stories for some moderated content, everyone has different thresholds, and it is your responsibility as a reader to avoid stories or stop reading if something bothers you. 
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Thorn Wilde
36 minutes ago, Parker Owens said:

It would still make a great song. The tune will come one day. Very lovely. 

 

Thank you! ❤️ 

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MacGreg

Very touching, and the stanzas are lyrical; I heard your song forming in my head as I read through. 

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Thorn Wilde
3 hours ago, MacGreg said:

Very touching, and the stanzas are lyrical; I heard your song forming in my head as I read through. 

 

Thank you! That's very kind. 

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Thorn Wilde
44 minutes ago, dughlas said:

I can hear the whisper of a song in the flow of words.

 

There's something there, I think. Just hard to find the right flow, since the metre is so choppy, for lack of a better word.

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D.K. Daniels

I don’t know about you, but I got a sense of time slipping away. Perhaps it’s the love you felt, having to get dressed and be apart from a loved one from the day that’s the emphasis of this lyrical piece. Thanks for the words :)

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Thorn Wilde
9 hours ago, D.K. Daniels said:

I don’t know about you, but I got a sense of time slipping away. Perhaps it’s the love you felt, having to get dressed and be apart from a loved one from the day that’s the emphasis of this lyrical piece. Thanks for the words :)

Thank you! That's a great analysis. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment. 

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