Thorny Poetry - 6. Right Here

It would still make a great song. The tune will come one day. Very lovely. 

36 minutes ago, Parker Owens said:

It would still make a great song. The tune will come one day. Very lovely. 

Thank you! ❤️ 

Very touching, and the stanzas are lyrical; I heard your song forming in my head as I read through. 

I can hear the whisper of a song in the flow of words.

3 hours ago, MacGreg said:

Very touching, and the stanzas are lyrical; I heard your song forming in my head as I read through. 

Thank you! That's very kind. 

44 minutes ago, dughlas said:

I can hear the whisper of a song in the flow of words.

There's something there, I think. Just hard to find the right flow, since the metre is so choppy, for lack of a better word.

I don’t know about you, but I got a sense of time slipping away. Perhaps it’s the love you felt, having to get dressed and be apart from a loved one from the day that’s the emphasis of this lyrical piece. Thanks for the words

9 hours ago, D.K. Daniels said:

I don’t know about you, but I got a sense of time slipping away. Perhaps it’s the love you felt, having to get dressed and be apart from a loved one from the day that’s the emphasis of this lyrical piece. Thanks for the words

Thank you! That's a great analysis. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.