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    Thorn Wilde
  • Thorn Wilde
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  • 04/21/2014
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Thorny Poetry - 1. Kiss Me with Books

kiss me with books,

with dusty bindings and yellowing pages

kiss me with old words, and new ones

kiss me with lines out of shakespeare, and chekov, and ibsen

kiss me with leather bound tomes and paperback novels

kiss me with poetry collections and short stories

with picture books and cookbooks

kiss me with my favourite books,

and with books i haven't heard of yet.

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Bumblebee

I think this is a good poem, but I agree with LJH that the poem would work better without all the kiss me's.

I personally didn't get the feeling of any emotion in your poem, which is what I love in the poetry I read. This feels more like it could be the start of a longer story (or poem) that elaborates on all the lines.. Like what books you felt were being used to kiss you.

 

But I think you've got good potential to write great poems.

Thorn Wilde
On 04/21/2014 06:19 PM, LJH said:
Hmmm....the only thing I would change is all the Kiss me's. The sentences would work well without constantly saying kiss me with...otherwise I enjoyed it. It shows your passion for the written word.
I like the repetition of the 'kiss me's, and shan't remove them. :P Thanks for taking the time to read and review, though. :) Glad you enjoyed it in spite of its shortcomings.
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On 04/21/2014 10:41 PM, Bumblebee said:
I think this is a good poem, but I agree with LJH that the poem would work better without all the kiss me's.

I personally didn't get the feeling of any emotion in your poem, which is what I love in the poetry I read. This feels more like it could be the start of a longer story (or poem) that elaborates on all the lines.. Like what books you felt were being used to kiss you.

 

But I think you've got good potential to write great poems.

I have never really been the poetic sort, which is why I mostly stick to prose, and when I write poetry invariably stick to free-verse. Any poetry I write that has fixed rhyme and metre tends to become song lyrics, where you can get away with a lot more and where repetition is encouraged as it's what hooks the listener, and even then I tend to stick to a stark, straight-forward story-telling type of poetry, where emotion is tied to the performance rather than just the words on their own.

 

I have performed this poem on open-mic nights and always had excellent response. Perhaps it is a text that lends itself better to slam poetry than to simply being read...

 

Thanks for taking the time to read and review! I appreciate your honesty. :)

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On 04/22/2014 01:26 PM, Irritable1 said:
I'm fine with the "kiss me" repetition, it gives the poem a pleasing cadence. I think though that the cadence and repetition give an impression of an approach to some kind of emotional climax, which doesn't quite come off. Still an enjoyable read though.
Thank you! :) I suppose to me the emotional climax comes down to the idea of all the books I haven't read yet... This poem equates love with wisdom and knowledge, in a sense, where the written word becomes the height of eroticism. Thanks for taking the time! Glad you enjoyed it. :)
Thorn Wilde
On 10/11/2014 07:33 AM, Lisa said:
Love your thorny poetry, Thorn! lol :P

 

I really enjoyed this poem b/c I am a lover of books also. Maybe not the books you love (Shakespeare, Ibsen, etc.), but books nonetheless. =)

 

And my absolute favorite thing to do is read. You will never find me without something to read, even if it's just my phone. lol

 

Ok, on to the next poetry reading...

I'll admit I chose writers that worked in the cadence of the poem. :P Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! :)
Thorn Wilde
On 01/09/2016 06:30 PM, Mikiesboy said:

Sometimes repetition is effective. To me, this would be less without the 'kiss me's'. With them there is joy and effervescence; it's almost a song.

If you're interested in poetry, try AC's Poetry Prompts. They are wonderful and a great way to learn..

thanks for posting this

tim

I'm more of a songwriter than a poet, really. Haven't got the patience for poetry, which is why I only write it when it happens on its own. :P Thanks so much for taking the time to comment on my meagre attempts! :)

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10 hours ago, D.K. Daniels said:

Lovely bit of reflection. I believe the flow is great, and the message is clear. If I were writing it I’d remove two of the kiss me’s to add more power to the remaining kiss me. Though still, the piece reminded me of my love for an actual physical book :)

Looking at this poem now I would probably have written it differently today. Thanks for all your lovely comments!

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