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So I'm having a horrible time with the final chapter of Frosted Hearts. Especially the first five pages. 

It's not blocked, I just can't get the wording right. I'm ready to bang my head into the concrete pavement until I see stars. 

The chapter is finished but I am so not happy with it. I think I might scrap it and start over. 

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1 minute ago, Jason Rimbaud said:

So I'm having a horrible time with the final chapter of Frosted Hearts. Especially the first five pages. 

It's not blocked, I just can't get the wording right. I'm ready to bang my head into the concrete pavement until I see stars. 

The chapter is finished but I am so not happy with it. I think I might scrap it and start over. 

You'll get it there. Last chapters are hard bittersweet pills at times. I need to jump into where I left off, I can't remember which chapter that was. I know I'm still needing to forgive Five for all his nonsense. I hope life will slow down and allow me to read again. :D 

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10 minutes ago, Krista said:

You'll get it there. Last chapters are hard bittersweet pills at times. I need to jump into where I left off, I can't remember which chapter that was. I know I'm still needing to forgive Five for all his nonsense. I hope life will slow down and allow me to read again. :D 

It has a lot of action, well for me, and I can't make it sound realistic. balls 

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39 minutes ago, Krista said:

 I hope life will slow down and allow me to read again. :D 

If that happens, let me know your secret. 

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4 hours ago, Jason Rimbaud said:

It has a lot of action, well for me, and I can't make it sound realistic. balls 

What kind of action? :devil:

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1 minute ago, lawfulneutralmage said:

What kind of action? :devil:

Hot 🔥 sex, hopefully 

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1 hour ago, lawfulneutralmage said:

What kind of action? :devil:

I a lot like Jeff Burton.  I don’t have hot action in my stories.  🤭

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5 hours ago, Jason Rimbaud said:

So I'm having a horrible time with the final chapter of Frosted Hearts. Especially the first five pages. 

It's not blocked, I just can't get the wording right. I'm ready to bang my head into the concrete pavement until I see stars. 

The chapter is finished but I am so not happy with it. I think I might scrap it and start over. 

If I can handle a certain promising author taking 3 months to continue a story (no judgement, I get the lack of inspiration), I can survive you needing a bit more time to your ending right.

But I bet you're harsher on your writing than your readers will be. You'll manage to write something you're happy with and we're going to like it. Unless Five and Percy break up, then I'll hate you.

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52 minutes ago, Jason Rimbaud said:

I a lot like Jeff Burton.  I don’t have hot action in my stories.  🤭

I know you aren’t mocking me Mister.  Just because you didn’t  tag my name doesn’t mean I’m not gonna see it!

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34 minutes ago, Davide said:

If I can handle a certain promising author taking 3 months to continue a story (no judgement, I get the lack of inspiration), I can survive you needing a bit more time to your ending right.

But I bet you're harsher on your writing than your readers will be. You'll manage to write something you're happy with and we're going to like it. Unless Five and Percy break up, then I'll hate you.

I would just like to point out one of the times this happened I disappeared for almost a year lol.  I think I’m doing good at only 3 months 😂

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19 minutes ago, Jeff Burton said:

I would just like to point out one of the times this happened I disappeared for almost a year lol.  I think I’m doing good at only 3 months 😂

I didn't know about the one year gap, I wasn't around yet, good to know I got lucky. But I really didn't mean that as criticism, I know that inspiration can come and go for no apparent reason.

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4 minutes ago, Davide said:

I didn't know about the one year gap, I wasn't around yet, good to know I got lucky. But I really didn't mean that as criticism, I know that inspiration can come and go for no apparent reason.

Trust me I didn’t take it as such lol.

Im having a tough go at it, a writer that can’t write is like erectile dysfunction and the pills don’t work. 😂

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9 hours ago, Davide said:

If I can handle a certain promising author taking 3 months to continue a story (no judgement, I get the lack of inspiration), I can survive you needing a bit more time to your ending right.

But I bet you're harsher on your writing than your readers will be. You'll manage to write something you're happy with and we're going to like it. Unless Five and Percy break up, then I'll hate you.

Hey @chris191070, are mad that Davide gave me an idea to break up Percy and FIve or are you mad that there is a delay in the release. 

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9 hours ago, Jeff Burton said:

  I think I’m doing good at only 3 months 😂

Just to make sure you actually see this post. 

And I want to prefix this comment by saying I'm sorry....

But first you said you were taking a break to allow your muse to recover. 

Then you said it was because you didn't want to post new content while they decided if you were a promising author. 

Now you're saying it's because your blocked again. 

Either way, you had three months with no writing, how come you haven't been reading your favorite authors on GA during that time?   

:P

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8 hours ago, Davide said:

 I know that inspiration can come and go for no apparent reason.

It doesn't come and go. :). Jeff's just comes, and comes, and comes.   :P.  

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1 minute ago, Davide said:

No, I absolutely did not. Don't you dare! I'll buy the ice cream place near your restaurant and replace all ice cream flavours with different kinds of chocolate.

My staff would love you!!!!!!!  

1 minute ago, Davide said:

Unlike his characters, who only are allowed to come, come and come off screen.

This must be the comment of the week!    Just so he doesn't feel left out.  @Jeff Burton

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10 hours ago, Jeff Burton said:

I would just like to point out one of the times this happened I disappeared for almost a year lol.  I think I’m doing good at only 3 months 😂

Sometimes real life can get in the way of writing (and even reading!) as well.  Hang in there, Jeff.

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13 minutes ago, Davide said:

Unlike his characters, who only are allowed to come, come and come off screen.

11 minutes ago, Jason Rimbaud said:

This must be the comment of the week!    Just so he doesn't feel left out.  @Jeff Burton

Agreed!! (on the comment being funny, as I haven't read enough of Jeff's work to verify the validity of the statement)

 

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On 4/2/2026 at 6:30 PM, Jason Rimbaud said:

Funniest comment of the week!

 

3 minutes ago, Jason Rimbaud said:

This must be the comment of the week!    Just so he doesn't feel left out.  @Jeff Burton

Two weeks in row? I'm on a roll!

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Jason Rimbaud dipped down behind the lip of the culvert that spilled into the flood overflow basin. He squinted as he peered into the darkness of the tunnel that led into the miles of Muni Tunnels beneath San Francisco. 

He looked over at Jeff Burton and grinned.

The prudish Jeff held out a canteen, which Jason took gratefully. As Jason took a long swallow, Jeff checked his P-90. "You know, we could always just tell them we couldn't find it." 

Jason spat out the warm water and replied, "And let that bastard destroy Pride." 

Jeff chuckled as he wiped the sweat from his brow. They were both dirty, crawling through Muni tunnels all night, leaving them covered in a layer of fine dust. "You're right. Besides, I owe MuffinLegs." 

"After he took out Lee and Ben, I figured it's time for payback," Jason said with a determined set of his shoulders. 

"Doc says they'll pull through," Jeff said as he switched on the light above the barrel of his rifle. "Lee will walk with a limp for the rest of his life." 

"Boys love men with war wounds," Jason said as he picked up his giant magnifying glass. "Might as well get to it." 

Jeff nodded, and they entered the large opening. 

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1 hour ago, Jason Rimbaud said:

     Jason Rimbaud dipped down behind the lip of the culvert that spilled into the flood overflow basin.  He squinted as he peered into the darkness of the tunnel that led into the miles of Muni Tunnels beneath San Francisco. 
     He looked over at Jeff Burton and grinned.
     The prudish Jeff held out a canteen, which Jason took gratefully.  As Jason took a long swallow, Jeff checked his P-90.  "You know, we could always just tell them we couldn't find it." 
     Jason spat out the warm water and replied, "And let that bastard destroy Pride." 
     Jeff chuckled as he wiped the sweat from his brow.  They were both dirty, crawling through Muni tunnels all night, leaving them covered in a layer of fine dust.  "You're right.  Besides, I owe MuffinLegs."
      "After he took out Lee and Ben, I figured it's time for payback," Jason said with a determined set of his shoulders. 
     "Doc says they'll pull through," Jeff said as he switched on the light above the barrel of his rifle.  "Lee will walk with a limp for the rest of his life." 
     "Boys love men with war wounds," Jason said as he picked up his giant magnifying glass.  "Might as well get to it." 
     Jeff nodded, and they entered the large opening. 

So, @Jason Rimbaud, is that from chapter 2 or chapter 3 of G I Ants?  

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Just now, ReaderPaul said:

So, @Jason Rimbaud, is that from chapter 2 or chapter 3 of G I Ants?  

How did you know my super top secret pinky swear project called G I Ants?   Did Jeff tell you? It's a collaboration between us. 

Don't worry, I'll write the spicy scenes.  :)

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