Disasters, Delights and Other Detours - 94. Inventions

Oh, yeah, these work, and work well. I liked the rhyming schemes very much and found the poems as a whole, fluid. Beautiful poetry with powerful messaging. Just about what I've come to expect from you, Parker. I'm still waiting for my poetic fire to reignite, but meanwhile, I have such as these to ruminate over and enjoy. Cheers!

13 minutes ago, Headstall said:

Oh, yeah, these work, and work well. I liked the rhyming schemes very much and found the poems as a whole, fluid. Beautiful poetry with powerful messaging. Just about what I've come to expect from you, Parker. I'm still waiting for my poetic fire to reignite, but meanwhile, I have such as these to ruminate over and enjoy. Cheers!

I’m so very glad you think the rhyme schemes and rhythms work. Your comments are wonderfully encouraging. Thank you! 

They work. While the image doesn't quite fit the words I visualize these as a dance. Oddly, when I read them aloud their flow was more stilted, like someone dancing an unknown step but when read silently the dancer was much more confident and moved fluidly. If I had first read them aloud I would say it was my own familiarity. However, as is my usual practice, I read them silently at first and then aloud, then because of my odd sense again silently. The image held though I am at a loss as to why. Nonetheless, I think your experiment a success. 

I forgot to ask is this your own or a style you encountered elsewhere.

16 minutes ago, dughlas said:

They work. While the image doesn't quite fit the words I visualize these as a dance. Oddly, when I read them aloud their flow was more stilted, like someone dancing an unknown step but when read silently the dancer was much more confident and moved fluidly. If I had first read them aloud I would say it was my own familiarity. However, as is my usual practice, I read them silently at first and then aloud, then because of my odd sense again silently. The image held though I am at a loss as to why. Nonetheless, I think your experiment a success. 

16 minutes ago, dughlas said:

I forgot to ask is this your own or a style you encountered elsewhere.

This form is my own invention, and I wasn’t at all sure what readers would think. Your comments are encouraging, though there may be enough changes in line length and rhythm to make me pause, if you found them distracting. The idea of a dance is intriguing. Thanks for letting me know your thoughts. I’m grateful you read these. 

Rings nicely in the ear. And the meaning of these two ring just as loudly, and clearly.

31 minutes ago, Geron Kees said:

Rings nicely in the ear. And the meaning of these two ring just as loudly, and clearly.

I’m glad these resonate in your ear. I was apprehensive about them. Thank you very much for reading these, and for considering them. 

On 8/17/2021 at 4:38 PM, Parker Owens said:

 

This form is my own invention, and I wasn’t at all sure what readers would think. Your comments are encouraging, though there may be enough changes in line length and rhythm to make me pause, if you found them distracting. The idea of a dance is intriguing. Thanks for letting me know your thoughts. I’m grateful you read these. 

I wouldn't say they were distracting, more just a case of different rythm. I think you should continue the experiment 

16 minutes ago, dughlas said:

I wouldn't say they were distracting, more just a case of different rythm. I think you should continue the experiment 

I will continue, and the search is on for suitable rhyme words. 

1 hour ago, Valkyrie said:

I liked this form a lot.  I liked the rhythm changes - they reminded me of Poe.  

It’s heartening to know this invented form has found a receptive ear. Now I shall have to renew my acquaintance with Edgar Allen as a poet. I’m very grateful you took time to read these and to respond to them.