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Ravings of a Rabid Werewolf - Poetry by Wolf - 1. The Ride

Poetry Prompt 1 - Tanka

The stallion stands still

A fresh oiled saddle waits

As the reins hang free

With a jump I become one

With my own bit of heaven

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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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AC Benus

A beautiful poem. You put every reader in the situation and let us feel the emotions too. Well done, and thanks for taking the Poetry Prompt challenge! 

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I see the images behind these words come alive in my mind's eye so very clearly. They evoke good and positive feelings. Made me :) 

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WolfM
7 hours ago, AC Benus said:

A beautiful poem. You put every reader in the situation and let us feel the emotions too. Well done, and thanks for taking the Poetry Prompt challenge! 

You're a very good and patient instructor, so thank you :)

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WolfM
6 hours ago, Mikiesboy said:

This is great wolfie!!  love it.. can see it.. just great!!!

Thank you for suggesting it :)

4 hours ago, mollyhousemouse said:

I'm so glad that @Mikiesboy suggested this.

It's very good! 

I can see the horse, and the reins hanging.

 

I hope to come back and read more 

Thank you :)

4 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

I see the images behind these words come alive in my mind's eye so very clearly. They evoke good and positive feelings. Made me :) 

Thank you :)

3 hours ago, Drew Espinosa said:

Wonderful tanka, Wolf! :D 

Thank you :)

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JeffreyL

I am not a horse person, but I definitely felt your pleasure in anticipating a ride. I agree with the others that you've done a beautiful job! I debated about my next comment, but old teachers never die. A Tanka has five lines, with lines one and three having five syllables. The other lines have seven. After years of teaching (including a unit on haiku) I am a little embarrassed to admit I read first for pleasure; then I count syllables. In line two oiled is one syllable, making your line six syllables instead of seven. An easy solution would be to change waits to awaits. I debated posting this. Please take it as constructive criticism. Your poem was beautifully written. Jeff

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WolfM
1 hour ago, JeffreyL said:

I am not a horse person, but I definitely felt your pleasure in anticipating a ride. I agree with the others that you've done a beautiful job! I debated about my next comment, but old teachers never die. A Tanka has five lines, with lines one and three having five syllables. The other lines have seven. After years of teaching (including a unit on haiku) I am a little embarrassed to admit I read first for pleasure; then I count syllables. In line two oiled is one syllable, making your line six syllables instead of seven. An easy solution would be to change waits to awaits. I debated posting this. Please take it as constructive criticism. Your poem was beautifully written. Jeff

Constructive criticism is how I learn :)

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WolfM
23 hours ago, Parker Owens said:

This is wonderfully concise, yet utterly beautiful. 

Thank you Parker :)

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