Popular Post Mikiesboy Posted October 2, 2016 Popular Post Share Posted October 2, 2016 (edited) I have finished my next story, After The Past. It's in editing right now and I hope to start posting it mid-October. I hope you enjoy this short excerpt. From After the Past: The day things started to change for the worse began with Jae chopping wood. I sat out on the back porch prepping some green beans while I watched. His muscles moved under his sun darkened skin. It was warm and soon he was sweating freely. I didn’t mind, it was a nice view. He stopped and propped the axe against the old stump we chopped on. Wiping the sweat from his brow, he walked to me, grinning broadly. “Need some water.” I dipped the chipped mug into a bucket of water and held it up to him. Jae drank it all down then he bent down and kissed me. It started off as a peck but developed into something more, hotter and more intense. He moved the basket of beans onto the porch and pulled me up. Now his arms were around me, pulling me against his hard body and his tongue pressing against mine. We were both panting when we broke apart. He pulled me back though and nuzzled my neck. Soft as a breeze on a hot summer day I heard him whisper, “I love you, David.” I pulled away a little and looked at his sweet face. “Do you?” Grinning, he just nodded. How did I feel? We’d become so very close. I reached up and stroked his cheek. “I love you too.” Jae just grunted and smiled. He pushed me back down, picked up the green beans, handed them to me, and gave me a peck on the cheek. He walked back to the stump, picked up the axe and started to chop again. Huh. I finished the beans and had taken them into the kitchen when I heard voices. Not raised, just conversation, but it scared me—we rarely saw other people. I’d been stupid the last time we’d been out in the truck, and left the rifle there. Then I heard Jae swear, I quickly grabbed another axe that sat in the mud room, and went out into the yard. Jae was talking to a man who sat astride a large yellow-coloured horse. It was a pretty thing. The man looked at me and the axe, and Jae saw the concern on my face—he held up a calming hand to me and the stranger. “David, it’s okay. I just got stung by a bee. It’s okay. This is Jim, he’s passing through but wondered if he could share some water. He’s got some berries to trade.” Not taking my eyes from the man, I told Jae to go ahead. Jim dismounted and led his beast to water. The animal drank deeply, now and then raising its streaming muzzle from the trough. Jim left the horse to graze under a tree in the yard, returned to Jae and gave him a bag full of blueberries. Jae and the stranger walked toward me, and Jae said he’d make some coffee. The man didn’t seem to be more than what he was, so I invited him to sit on the porch. “Thank you. I’ve been in the saddle for a few days now. I’m heading north up to Canada.” “Why is that?” “I stopped for water but also I have news. There’s a large gang of men, burning and thieving, coming this way. I saw them and what they can do, and it wasn’t pretty. I’m tired of trouble mister, so I saddled Pedro there and started on my way. I saw your smoke and thought maybe you might share a little water and I’d share the news. Sorry it ain’t better.” Thanks for reading this little snippet! tim Edited October 2, 2016 by Mikiesboy 13 Link to comment
Site Administrator Valkyrie Posted October 2, 2016 Site Administrator Share Posted October 2, 2016 You've definitely drawn me in! i look forward to reading it when you post. 1 Link to comment
Hunter Thomson Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 Looks very interesting, I'm looking forward to your release date and having a read through. 1 Link to comment
Site Moderator Reader1810 Posted October 2, 2016 Site Moderator Share Posted October 2, 2016 I could be wrong, but I sense this scene is not taking place in our current world. Tasks and actions have me thinking of a bygone era, but I have a feeling that is not right..... I am intrigued. 1 Link to comment
Carlos Hazday Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 Something else to add to the reading list. Sound like this one may skip ahead to the front of the line... 1 Link to comment
Headstall Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 Oh boy! <rubs hands> Love it, tim, and look forward to more... they ride horses!! 3 Link to comment
dughlas Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 This one doesn't so lighthearted as J&M. I'm curious. 1 Link to comment
LitLover Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 Well you have me intrigued! So far I like the characters... at least what I know of them. I look forward to knowing more about their history, how they met, why they are where they are, and who this gang is. Great hook to draw us in, tim! 1 Link to comment
Mikiesboy Posted October 2, 2016 Author Share Posted October 2, 2016 You've definitely drawn me in! i look forward to reading it when you post. I hope you like it, Val .. it's different for me .. Looks very interesting, I'm looking forward to your release date and having a read through. Thanks Hunter ... I hope you will enjoy it. I could be wrong, but I sense this scene is not taking place in our current world. Tasks and actions have me thinking of a bygone era, but I have a feeling that is not right..... I am intrigued. I'm glad. Hope you enjoy the whole thing.... 2 Link to comment
Mikiesboy Posted October 2, 2016 Author Share Posted October 2, 2016 Oh boy! <rubs hands> Love it, tim, and look forward to more... they ride horses!! They do .. i just hope i did them right.... otherwise I'm sure I'll be in trouble with you and Kitt and other horsey people. This one doesn't so lighthearted as J&M. I'm curious. No, this isn't lighthearted .. just life I think. Link to comment
Mikiesboy Posted October 2, 2016 Author Share Posted October 2, 2016 (edited) Well you have me intrigued! So far I like the characters... at least what I know of them. I look forward to knowing more about their history, how they met, why they are where they are, and who this gang is. Great hook to draw us in, tim! sorry out of likes .. all that's in there LL .. hopefully all your questions will be answered Edited October 2, 2016 by Mikiesboy 1 Link to comment
AC Benus Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 Brilliant. Not having any context is delightful - this could be a zombie tale (although I hope not ), or a horror 'flick,' or just a simple tale of men escaping homophobia.... It savors of an historical or alt-reality time setting, and tastes dusty. I mean that in a great way; it instantly reminds me of Steinbeck . How great a compliment is that!!! Love it. 3 Link to comment
Mikiesboy Posted October 2, 2016 Author Share Posted October 2, 2016 Brilliant. Not having any context is delightful - this could be a zombie tale (although I hope not ), or a horror 'flick,' or just a simple tale of men escaping homophobia.... It savors of an historical or alt-reality time setting, and tastes dusty. I mean that in a great way; it instantly reminds me of Steinbeck . How great a compliment is that!!! Love it. Wow AC, i love that ... it tastes dusty. Steinbeck? That's massive and I hope the rest of this lives up to it. Thanks very much. tim xo 1 Link to comment
Site Moderator Reader1810 Posted October 2, 2016 Site Moderator Share Posted October 2, 2016 Brilliant. Not having any context is delightful - this could be a zombie tale (although I hope not ), or a horror 'flick,' or just a simple tale of men escaping homophobia.... It savors of an historical or alt-reality time setting, and tastes dusty. I mean that in a great way; it instantly reminds me of Steinbeck . How great a compliment is that!!! Love it. I confess, I don't know who Steinbeck is but I love that you think this "tastes dusty". I kind of think so too. 1 Link to comment
Mikiesboy Posted October 2, 2016 Author Share Posted October 2, 2016 I confess, I don't know who Steinbeck is but I love that you think this "tastes dusty". I kind of think so too. Reader!! John Steinbeck .. The Grapes of Wrath, East of Eden. and my fav Of Mice and Men ... if you have not read him.... please please do. 1 Link to comment
Site Moderator Reader1810 Posted October 2, 2016 Site Moderator Share Posted October 2, 2016 Reader!! John Steinbeck .. The Grapes of Wrath, East of Eden. and my fav Of Mice and Men ... if you have not read him.... please please do. Does it help that I know all the titles you've mentioned? Course, I haven't read any of them...I'm guessing I should...... 1 Link to comment
Parker Owens Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 And now I have to wait? Ohhhhhh! 1 Link to comment
Site Administrator Valkyrie Posted October 2, 2016 Site Administrator Share Posted October 2, 2016 Does it help that I know all the titles you've mentioned? Course, I haven't read any of them...I'm guessing I should...... Yes, Steinbeck's novels are very worth the read. They are classics. I agree with AC. The excerpt does have a bit of a dust bowl feel, and definitely that of a by-gone era. 3 Link to comment
Timothy M. Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 I could be wrong, but I sense this scene is not taking place in our current world. Tasks and actions have me thinking of a bygone era, but I have a feeling that is not right..... I am intrigued. Interesting, I wondered if we were in a post-apocalyptic future. And how can you not know Steinbeck? 1 Link to comment
Site Moderator Reader1810 Posted October 2, 2016 Site Moderator Share Posted October 2, 2016 Interesting, I wondered if we were in a post-apocalyptic future. And how can you not know Steinbeck? I had that thought as well As for not remembering who Steinbeck was, I know his book titles - that has to count for something... 3 Link to comment
Timothy M. Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 As for not remembering who Steinbeck was, I know his book titles - that has to count for something... lol, true. I simply assumed everybody in our generation got introduced to him in school (not just in the USA). 1 Link to comment
Mikiesboy Posted October 2, 2016 Author Share Posted October 2, 2016 Does it help that I know all the titles you've mentioned? Course, I haven't read any of them...I'm guessing I should...... You should honestly.. there have been film adaptations of them all.. he's such a great writer though.. And now I have to wait? Ohhhhhh! Sorry Parker .. it's all finished though.. so no waiting unless I can't for some reason but I'll give AC permission to do it for me 4 Link to comment
Site Moderator Reader1810 Posted October 2, 2016 Site Moderator Share Posted October 2, 2016 (edited) lol, true. I simply assumed everybody in our generation got introduced to him in school (not just in the USA). Nope, they were not part of my reading lists in high school - or university for that matter. Edited October 4, 2016 by Reader1810 1 Link to comment
AC Benus Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 lol, true. I simply assumed everybody in our generation got introduced to him in school (not just in the USA). That's an interesting comment, and got me thinking. We read a TON of authors in HS, but no Steinbeck. However, our junior high school readers had great Steinbeck stories (and hence my love of the man). We read The Red Pony - heartbreaking! And also a story he wrote about a boy in Norway during World War 2. It was powerful stuff 2 Link to comment
Defiance19 Posted October 2, 2016 Share Posted October 2, 2016 Interesting excerpt tim. Looking forward to all of it. :-) 1 Link to comment
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