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    Parker Owens
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Disasters, Delights and Other Detours - 70. Descent and Ascent

I have been experimenting with varied metric patterns. I found poems formed this way in the works of George Herbert, and decided to try some on my own. Perhaps you can determine the patterns - and whether these modern examples work at all.

Desire conceived in snapshot haste

entangles swift

those pliant minds with thoughts unchaste

which veer and drift

upon sharp shoals of wreck and waste.

Seduced by fantasies untold

soon one is bound

by sirens’ songs surpassing cold,

no pity found,

or captives who were e’er paroled.

 

Once caught within this mental trap,

How to escape?

For there’s no well-marked folding map,

or hole agape

in fences which around us wrap.

Yet hope within the heart survives,

for friends still smile,

time taken from their busy lives

to spend a while

and help him o’er the wall who strives.


If you feel inclined to leave a thought or reflection here, I'd be grateful. Thank you for reading.
Copyright © 2017 Parker Owens; All Rights Reserved.
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northie

A double rhyming scheme which changes half way through each stanza? Show off.  :lol:  You have achieved an intriguing, fascinating mix of the Jacobean and today. Bravo.

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dughlas

I like the rhyming scheme to my mind it causes the phrasing to dance and skip but more importantly I like the words.

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Geron Kees

What Northie said! What Valkyrie said! What everyone said! :)

Another intriguing experiment!

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4 hours ago, northie said:

A double rhyming scheme which changes half way through each stanza? Show off.  :lol:  You have achieved an intriguing, fascinating mix of the Jacobean and today. Bravo.

Blame whoever taught George Herbert for the complex rhyme and meter scheme. I found it fascinating, almost conversational, and an irresistible challenge. Thanks very much for having a good look at these neo-Jacobean lines.

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4 hours ago, Valkyrie said:

What northie said :)  

It’s a fun pattern to write in, allowing for various kinds of changes in tempo. Thank you for trying it on for size. 

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3 hours ago, Headstall said:

Ditto. I found it uplifting, and in layman's terms, singsong-ey. :) 

Thank you! Singsong is a good way to describe how I heard some of these lines. If you felt buoyant too, that’s awesome. Thank you for looking at this. 

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3 hours ago, dughlas said:

I like the rhyming scheme to my mind it causes the phrasing to dance and skip but more importantly I like the words.

You’re amazingly kind. I’m glad it gives you a dance feel; better still, you like what the poem says. I’m grateful you took time to read and respond to this. 

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3 hours ago, Geron Kees said:

What Northie said! What Valkyrie said! What everyone said! :)

Another intriguing experiment!

An easier experiment to try than what might be attempted in a chemistry lab, and much more pleasant to the ear. Thanks for reading this and for your thoughts. 

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2 hours ago, Mikiesboy said:

Enjoyed them both!!  I'd say these are a success. :)

I’m really glad you liked these. It was fun playing with the patterns, maybe because I’m such a math nerd. Thank you for reading these and letting me know what you thought. 

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