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Disasters, Delights and Other Detours - 81. Faceless

A series of skyscrapers with the barest outline of a story. Any errors here are mine alone.

It's one thing

to understand oneself,

and quite another to advertise,

allowing one's deepest desires to be handled

like produce or meat at the market,

compared critically for

quality.

 

Impatient

for any reaction,

anticipating an inquiry,

or yet perhaps an impromptu invitation,

idle fingers fidget without aim,

hoping for a message

on the screen.

 

Three hard knocks

upon a stranger's door,

feet unsure of their place on the floor,

waiting for the unknown host to reveal himself

and answer all one's unasked questions

while being ushered in

and unmasked.

 

Discussion

is unnecessary

to swift searching tongues and roaming hands

concentrating a whole lifetime's exploration

into a few feverish moments

which yield all pretense to

certainty.

 

No details

which might identify

can be allowed to remain behind,

nor must any stray words which might untune the heart

stain the scandal-scented atmosphere

when all is accomplished

and reclothed.


If you feel moved to comment, rant, rave or go off on tangents, please feel free to do so. I appreciate whatever is said.
Copyright © 2017 Parker Owens; All Rights Reserved.
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Valkyrie
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These are well-written and tell a clear story.  They remind me of Rick in your new story :hug:  

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Headstall

Reminded me of Rick too. It's a great poem in its entirety, but I found it sad. It is so commonplace, and maybe it's what's needed at the time, but what is he left with? "Accomplished" in the final verse kind of stung me. Very evocative, Parker. 

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Parker Owens
3 hours ago, Valkyrie said:

These are well-written and tell a clear story.  They remind me of Rick in your new story :hug:  

Thank you very much for your thoughts on this. I'm glad the story came through; sometimes one is tempted to overthink things. Yes, this too reminds me of Rick.

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Parker Owens
20 minutes ago, Headstall said:

Reminded me of Rick too. It's a great poem in its entirety, but I found it sad. It is so commonplace, and maybe it's what's needed at the time, but what is he left with? "Accomplished" in the final verse kind of stung me. Very evocative, Parker. 

Thank you very much for taking time to read this and for your comments on it. The story is terribly commonplace, yet I am glad the story arc was apparent. If it evoked emptiness and sterility, then it must have hit its mark. Once again, my thanks.

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84Mags
6 hours ago, Valkyrie said:

These are well-written and tell a clear story.  They remind me of Rick in your new story :hug:  

👆🏻I thought the same.... Rick 🥺

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Parker Owens
5 minutes ago, 84Mags said:

👆🏻I thought the same.... Rick 🥺

I'm wondering if he's not inhabiting my subconscious. Thank you for reading!

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AC Benus

I think you explore the potential of the form really well. You expand it to tell a narrative, yet maintain the integrity of each stanza skyscraper to be a fully contained combo of image and emotion. Really well done!

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northie

Doing story research (real research this time...) led to the same sort of thoughts. To me, it would be completely alien; to a substantial number of our community it is the norm. Mechanistic? Or no-strings fun which doesn't hurt anyone. To me, the final skyscraper says it all. 

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dughlas

Well written and evocative of the time perhaps though they leave me a bit empty. I prefer a more personal connection.

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Parker Owens
1 hour ago, AC Benus said:

I think you explore the potential of the form really well. You expand it to tell a narrative, yet maintain the integrity of each stanza skyscraper to be a fully contained combo of image and emotion. Really well done!

The more I use the form, the more adaptable it becomes to conveying feelings and actions. It's as if one tells the course of the hours in black-and-white photographic snapshots. Thank you for your very kind words and encouragement, and especially for reading this Wolkenkratzergedichte.

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Parker Owens
1 hour ago, northie said:

Doing story research (real research this time...) led to the same sort of thoughts. To me, it would be completely alien; to a substantial number of our community it is the norm. Mechanistic? Or no-strings fun which doesn't hurt anyone. To me, the final skyscraper says it all. 

Thank you for reading this, and for commenting on it. It seems like an experience, but one that is emptied of connection and warmth. I am glad you felt the last skyscraper conveyed this.

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Parker Owens
30 minutes ago, dughlas said:

Well written and evocative of the time perhaps though they leave me a bit empty. I prefer a more personal connection.

If this leaves you feeling empty, or hollow, then these lines succeeded in their aim. Like you, I prefer warmth and personality. Thank you for reading, and for commenting.

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