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Prompt #213 - First Line


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OMG Joann.  Just because I could, doesn't mean that I would  :P  

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Wow, Joann! :*)  Just....hmmmm....wow! LOL



OMG Joann.  Just because I could, doesn't mean that I would   :P

 Sooo Cassie, what are we going to name the baby???

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Jo Ann, this was hilarious. Thanks for letting us know KC's dirty secrets.  :lmao:  

 

Aditus, really well done. It was very amusing and soo sweet. :)

 

This seems to be a really interesting prompt. And such interesting responses.  :2thumbs:

 

Cheers

Ieshwar

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Aditus - I really enjoyed your story. It was cute and a lot of fun.

 

Jo Ann - Remind me not to piss you off dear. I can see I might end up with my hands full with the four of you. :lol: I don't know whether I should be grateful you leave me out of your stories or upset you haven't included me. :P

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Wow, Joann! :*)  Just....hmmmm....wow! LOL

 

 Sooo Cassie, what are we going to name the baby???

Oh, sorry I forgot to tell you.  Make it babies.  I'm having triplets  :D  (Well done, sir)!

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Nicely done, Aditus. There's a nice flow to the conversation in your writing. I would have placed a "like" on it but I've hit my quota for the day.

 

Hope to see more of your contributions :)

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Thank you guys. I don't know what happened, as soon as I read the required first line my fingers took off of their own.

I'm glad you liked it. :)

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Well the prompts are there to give you ideas and help you write. Glad it inspired you.

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I never worry about length when it comes to a prompt. I have seen them turned into poetry and into full length multi-chaptered stories. It is all up to how the author sees the prompt and runs with it. I really enjoyed this Greg. You really had an interesting twist to it and I hope you find other prompts that inspire you as well.

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It's a very interesting take on the prompt. A bit of humour, mystery and romance. Nice! :D

 

Cheers

Ieshwar

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Your poem is simply amazing, Layla. It feels so raw, especially the pain... Well-done!

 

Cheers

Ieshwar

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I decided to try this in poem form, i hope that's okay.

 

 

For you I danced in summer rain

Naked beneath the streetlights twirling

On tiptoes in leaves and grass

Worshipping the moon

And you

Always you.

 

You said jump and I jumped

Arms outstretched

Grasping at stars and air

Laughing and screaming

Trusting in you to catch me

But you never did.

 

For you I bowed when you said bow

And crawled across the floor

Your fingers on the strings

And my pulse racing

‘cause you were the light

And I was just a room

Empty and dark

 

You said follow and I followed

Dragging tired limbs through broken glass

My dreams abandoned

Yours embraced

Even when you left me shattered

A broken marionette upon the floor

 

You said love and I loved

Though I didn’t believe the word meant

What you thought it meant

And when you said break I broke

All while thinking…

“You want me to what?”

 

Love how you incorporated that into the ending :P

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JoAnn - you are freaking hysterical! This was so funny I was falling out of my chair! You have got to write more often! :)

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I guess I should have saved up all my comments for one reply.

 

I got so engrossed in reading all of these terrific prompts. I never paid any attention to this prompt section before.

 

Aditus - your short story was terrific! Ben sure knew what he was doing to get Nick to do what he wanted. lol

 

Greg - it was so good to read something from you again. I loved the story; it had me at the edge of my seat.

 

Layla - oh my freaking God - what a fantastic poem! It gave me chills. Emily Dickinson who? Jesus, you should submit that. Seriously. Better than your fave, Frost. Imo.

 

Everyone wrote such terrific stuff. I really should check this out more often.

 

Markypoo, too funny! ;)

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