timmy's poetry - 53. See and To Sir, with love

Both are great poems. See is one I can connect with very strongly. Even as a teen, I somewhat dreaded the chore of putting in/taking out the screen for the porch door. Not that I minded the task itself, but I always felt I should be memorializing the changing of the seasons with something more permanent. With this poem, you have done just that. 

For the second one, it's beautiful. 

These are both beautiful tim. While technically not connected. They are, both have you self-reflective. 
See, shows us too busy to celebrate and appreciate the things around us. We need that time to breathe, center, and reconnect to our surroundings. 
The second is a renewal of vows. To be obedient, giving yourself fully. A promise to be all that you can be. 
Both are beautiful sentiments simple and reminders of things not to be taken for granted.. Great job lil brother. xoxo 

And we huddle here in the heat and cold

Bustling, rushing always, there and back

Hither, dither

Staring at screens, we miss the chipmunk

And the flight of the bumblebee

Beautifully done. "See" is a simple elegant poem of nature.

On 9/22/2017 at 9:44 AM, Parker Owens said:

See is such a deceptively simple title for the wonders and joys you describe. The symphonies of geese, the crystal clear days and misty mornings, and the butterflies passing through the golds and purples of my garden: your words bring them all to mind as you pianist your images so vividly. 

 

To Sir offers me a very different kind of supply for my imagination. But the passion and emotion that springs from every stanza cannot help but set the heart resonating. 

 

These are both beautifully done tim. 

thank you very much Parker. 

On 9/22/2017 at 1:12 PM, Reader1810 said:

Staring at screens, we miss the chipmunk

And the flight of the bumblebee

 

I have mused as to why I feel a need to walk outside - even if it's cold or rainy - rather than inside on a treadmill. These two lines say it best. I have a need to see and hear the world around me. No headphones do I wear.

 

As for the second poem? It seems you've found what centres you and gives you peace. Not always and easy thing to do. I am happy for you, tim.  

 

As always, nicely done.  

 

 

just going for a walk brings peace doesn't it?  leave the noise behind ... 

On 9/22/2017 at 5:33 PM, AC Benus said:

Both are great poems. See is one I can connect with very strongly. Even as a teen, I somewhat dreaded the chore of putting in/taking out the screen for the porch door. Not that I minded the task itself, but I always felt I should be memorializing the changing of the seasons with something more permanent. With this poem, you have done just that. 

 

For the second one, it's beautiful. 

Interesting to hear what you were thinking about.. you were not a 'normal' teen i dont think... thanks for reading and your comments

On 9/23/2017 at 5:00 AM, BlindAmbition said:

These are both beautiful tim. While technically not connected. They are, both have you self-reflective. 
See, shows us too busy to celebrate and appreciate the things around us. We need that time to breathe, center, and reconnect to our surroundings. 
The second is a renewal of vows. To be obedient, giving yourself fully. A promise to be all that you can be. 
Both are beautiful sentiments simple and reminders of things not to be taken for granted.. Great job lil brother. xoxo 

i love your insight and how you look at things, jp .. you see things i never do ..i love to see your comments xoxxo