timmy's poetry - 4. The Pit

Eloquent... smooth and polished... I wonder... was it coincidence that the sentences dwindled in length as the poem was revealed?

Hugs tim.

Hugs first, reactions second.
Your images of increasing slope, polished, slippery surfaces, have the power to frighten. Certainly, that's how this makes me feel...scared and powerless.

"No longer are there handholds to save me." I immediately thought of human hands to hold... A very thoughtful, albeit sad, poem, tim. I hope putting the words down has helped heal some of the emotion portrayed within the lines.

Oh my... the first moment I heard "The Pit" I was like... oh noes! But I hope you're not alone in your pit.

On 01/18/2017 12:14 PM, mollyhousemouse said:

On 01/18/2017 12:40 PM, Headstall said:

Eloquent... smooth and polished... I wonder... was it coincidence that the sentences dwindled in length as the poem was revealed?

It wasn't planned ... just came out that way

xoxo

On 01/18/2017 01:04 PM, dughlas said:

Hugs tim.

On 01/18/2017 01:13 PM, Valkyrie said:

On 01/18/2017 01:16 PM, Parker Owens said:

Hugs first, reactions second.

Your images of increasing slope, polished, slippery surfaces, have the power to frighten. Certainly, that's how this makes me feel...scared and powerless.

I feel like that too. xoxo

On 01/18/2017 01:41 PM, MacGreg said:

"No longer are there handholds to save me." I immediately thought of human hands to hold... A very thoughtful, albeit sad, poem, tim. I hope putting the words down has helped heal some of the emotion portrayed within the lines.

A nearly vertical polished wall, with living hands, yes exactly... writing it helps ... Sleep is better

xoxo

On 01/18/2017 02:07 PM, Ashi said:

Oh my... the first moment I heard "The Pit" I was like... oh noes! But I hope you're not alone in your pit.

alone yes, but not home alone. you always make me smile Ashi!

On 01/18/2017 04:55 PM, Reader1810 said:

Say what you need to say anytime you like. There will always be lots of "someones" to listen and appreciate your effort. my friend

thank you reader.

On 01/19/2017 03:37 AM, Lyssa said:

:no: :yes:

On 01/24/2017 10:54 AM, AC Benus said:

:no: :yes:

Thanks AC.