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Disasters, Delights and Other Detours - 41. February Haiku

These were written in response to @AC Benus's challenge set out in his excellent Poetry Prompts (Chapter 3) in this case. If you find errors, flaws or heresies, I am wholly to blame.
The old hawthorn tree
bows in sullen obeisance
to the snow's misrule.
 
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Silent steam rises
from the black sinuous creek
exhaling laughter.
 
*
 
The new dawn sunrise
reveals waves of pink ice clouds
crashing on the ridge.
 
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Cold, sharp-edged snowflakes
fly before the cruel north wind
searching for the ground.
 
*
 
Below crystal stars,
the great horned owl fills the woods
with its bass solo.
 
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Snowy privet limbs
cannot hide the cardinal,
waiting out the storm.
I encourage anyone and everyone to try taking up the Poetry Prompts. If you want to leave a comment or thought, I will be delighted.
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Parker i'm so glad you're doing this too!  i'm learning so much from everyone who's doing it.

of the 6 you posted, this is my favorite:

 

The new dawn sunrise
reveals waves of pink ice clouds
crashing on the ridge.
 
@AC Benus commented that maybe there is too much description, i think i see that. Haiku are supposed to be simple (?) so maybe try use fewer descriptive words
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These are wonderful, Parker.  They are quite evocative of our most recent storm, and storms of the past.  The first reminds me of the beautiful hawthorn I lost during the October storm 12 years ago.  It folded in half, like an umbrella, under the weight of the early snow.  I also love the exhaling laughter and snow searching for the ground.  The sunrise over pink ice clouds reminds me of the view during my drive to work on Friday.  Excellent job, as always.  :hug: 

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1 hour ago, Headstall said:

A great collection, Parker. 

 

Cold, sharp-edged snowflakes
fly before the cruel north wind
searching for the ground.
 
I could see the snow swirling as it 'searched' for the ground. Wonderful. And I pictured the bright red of the cardinal, against the white of the snow... very visual. :heart: 

 

Yes, you have the image I held in mind exactly. The snow was in such a hurry this week... thanks for reading these, and for commenting. 

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1 hour ago, Mikiesboy said:

these are good Parker.  My favs are the simpler final two in the collection.  We are lucky to have cardinals ... they are jewels against the snow and greenery.

 

Thank you, tim, for reading these. Cardinals are amongst my favorite birds. Bright and beautiful in the snow, against the forsythia in spring, in the spruces at summer, or bidding farewell to the migrants in the fall - they never fail to make me smile. I wasn’t sure of the owl’s bass solo, but it seemed to fit best. 

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1 hour ago, mollyhousemouse said:

Parker i'm so glad you're doing this too!  i'm learning so much from everyone who's doing it.

of the 6 you posted, this is my favorite:

 

The new dawn sunrise
reveals waves of pink ice clouds
crashing on the ridge.
 
@AC Benus commented that maybe there is too much description, i think i see that. Haiku are supposed to be simple (?) so maybe try use fewer descriptive words

 

I’m glad this particular poem appealed to you. Complexity is my downfall, I fear. I frequently fall into that trap. Thank you for your observation. 

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1 hour ago, Valkyrie said:

These are wonderful, Parker.  They are quite evocative of our most recent storm, and storms of the past.  The first reminds me of the beautiful hawthorn I lost during the October storm 12 years ago.  It folded in half, like an umbrella, under the weight of the early snow.  I also love the exhaling laughter and snow searching for the ground.  The sunrise over pink ice clouds reminds me of the view during my drive to work on Friday.  Excellent job, as always.  :hug: 

 

You saw the same sunrise as I did, perhaps. I’m glad these resonated with you and your experience of the recent storm. Your comments are most kind.

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4 hours ago, AC Benus said:

All very evocative and strong. The pink horizon image probably sticks with me the clearest, as it reminds me of such mornings seen when I was a boy. Thanks you for taking the poetry prompt challenge, Parker. I appreciate it!  

 

I’m glad the dawn ice clouds stuck with you, as they did with me. January provided enough observations to merit a set all on its own. Thank you for this poetry prompt challenge. I enjoyed working on it immensely. In fact, I was so taken that even though there was integral calculus waiting, I went off on a tangent in class about writing Haiku, and offered extra credit to any student turning in a Haiku (as outlined in the prompt) with the assignment. 

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28 minutes ago, Parker Owens said:

 

I’m glad the dawn ice clouds stuck with you, as they did with me. January provided enough observations to merit a set all on its own. Thank you for this poetry prompt challenge. I enjoyed working on it immensely. In fact, I was so taken that even though there was integral calculus waiting, I went off on a tangent in class about writing Haiku, and offered extra credit to any student turning in a Haiku (as outlined in the prompt) with the assignment. 

That deserves both a "love" and a "HaHa" like :) I am confident some students will take you up on the challenge. The phrase "pass it forward" comes to mind 

 

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48 minutes ago, Lyssa said:

Wonderful Haikus, I just came back from a journey into the mountains and snow, and to read this, brings the pictures and impressions in my mind alive again. Great! Thank you for sharing. 🙂

 

Thank you for your kind comments. I’m glad these could call up happy images from your journey in your mind. These were fun to compose. 

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