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    Parker Owens
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  • 01/11/2016
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Occasional Poetry - 10. Lyric #3.5

em>I made many mistakes herein; edited them, then put them back. I own them. Written in response to Poetry Prompt 3, Lyric.
Warmth and comfort, arms so gentle
wrapped around my torso;
scent familiar, transcendental,
fills my spirit; more so
 
Fanning memory's glowing embers,
flick'ring dim lit rapture.
And the body still remembers
all consuming capture.
 
em>Thanks especially to AC and Tim and all the Live Poets.
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Parker Owens
On 01/11/2016 12:30 PM, Headstall said:

s'wonderful. s'marvelous... lots of feeling here... special feeling. I love it Parker, in the overall sentiment, and I love the word choices. You've 'captured' my attention here, they way you've 'captured' a moment... well done... cheers... Gary...

Thank you, Gary. And you're right, of course. One of the best sensations in the world...thanks and cheers to you, too.

AC Benus

The back and forth of the rhythm here (from 8 syllables to 6; and repeat), is great. This prompt challenge is all about getting comfortable with a limited amount of space per line to get your message across.

 

Here, your 'melody' (as achieved by really fine metre) just sings! They don’t call this type of poetry lyrical for nothing! And I think you're proving that.

 

I also love the images in the poem itself. Sensual moments...well, those are the stuff of poets' hearts and poets' quiet moments too. I like the idea that the body remembers just as well as the mind does.

 

Great job!

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Parker Owens
On 01/11/2016 12:55 PM, Mikiesboy said:

It's perfect just the way it is. It's okay to ask what others think, but it's always yours and personally I think you made the right choice.

This works beautifully in my mind.

great

tim

Thank you Tim. Your encouragement means so much to me. Like a tricky math problem, writing poetry leaves me wondering if I really got it 'right.' But unlike Calculus, there's no way to check your answer!

Parker Owens
On 01/11/2016 12:57 PM, AC Benus said:

The back and forth of the rhythm here (from 8 syllables to 6; and repeat), is great. This prompt challenge is all about getting comfortable with a limited amount of space per line to get your message across.

 

Here, your 'melody' (as achieved by really fine metre) just sings! They don’t call this type of poetry lyrical for nothing! And I think you're proving that.

 

I also love the images in the poem itself. Sensual moments...well, those are the stuff of poets' hearts and poets' quiet moments too. I like the idea that the body remembers just as well as the mind does.

 

Great job!

Thank you. The images and senses drove what I came out on the paper (really. paper!). The body remembers a lot for us; reminds us of what we felt, touched, yearned for. And the metre is fun - yes it's counting, and my fingers are getting calloused from ticking off syllables. Thanks for the challenge and your encouragement.

Parker Owens
On 01/11/2016 07:49 PM, Emi GS said:

Its so perfect and wonderful poem you have here, rather than the silly rap we all here from you... :)

 

Don't mind me ok? I am Just kidding... Its true what I said about this poem. I loved it so much. And I liked all your poems and raps... :)

I shan't mind a whit; there is the real poetry I'm trying to learn, and the doggerel you're used to seeing from me. Both have their places. And I am very glad you liked this poem.

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