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Occasional Poetry - 5. Change in the Weather

i>December
Autumn's scent changes color
tasting lighter on the tongue.
Deer transfixed in greying fields
weigh ashen gloom against winds
rising far beyond unknown mountains.
Stones and maples wait, impatient
children long denied their sleep.
All wait the coming great white
change from waking into rest.
Any irregularities are mine.
Copyright © 2017 Parker Owens; All Rights Reserved.
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Headstall

Loved it, Parker. You paint a marvellous picture. I particularly love the first two lines... terrific beginning into what follows... well done... cheers... Gary...

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On 12/07/2015 01:39 PM, skinnydragon said:

yes they do, as do we all

 

Very lovely Parker, gently said

Thank you. This is the kind of stuff we think of supervising study halls.

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On 12/07/2015 01:40 PM, Headstall said:

Loved it, Parker. You paint a marvellous picture. I particularly love the first two lines... terrific beginning into what follows... well done... cheers... Gary...

The deer are everywhere right now, all adrift, nervous and confused. It will get better for them when the snow comes. They'll know where to go. Kind of feel like that myself sometimes. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

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Mikiesboy

Study hall again, huh? Do you all do that? Maybe you all need to put them in a book.. Poems from Study Hall...
Anyway.. lovely poem.. could see it all .. and felt a chill in the air; a taste of what's to come..
great
tim

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On 12/07/2015 02:12 PM, Mikiesboy said:

Study hall again, huh? Do you all do that? Maybe you all need to put them in a book.. Poems from Study Hall...

Anyway.. lovely poem.. could see it all .. and felt a chill in the air; a taste of what's to come..

great

tim

Love the idea of a study hall poetry collection. Thanks for looking over this one. I liked it, too.

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northie

I love the opening two lines with the mixing of the senses. It had the effect of making me stop and assess, or trying to imagine your word picture instead of just gliding over the words with barely a hesitation. Three different senses all employed to the same end ... Wow! :)

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On 09/03/2016 12:08 AM, northie said:

I love the opening two lines with the mixing of the senses. It had the effect of making me stop and assess, or trying to imagine your word picture instead of just gliding over the words with barely a hesitation. Three different senses all employed to the same end ... Wow! :)

I fell in love with that first line walking home one night, and had to scribble it down. But Autumn has its own scent, an earthy, rich smell that defies categorization until you include other senses in its description. It is perhaps a distillation of anticipation...thank you for your patience with my untimely response...

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Aviana

I love the way you started, with the change in the autumn's scent...then making it visually rich with the 'greying field' or 'the rising gloom beyond the mountain'...it was a wonderful read:2thumbs:

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On July 5, 2017 at 11:47 AM, Aviana said:

I love the way you started, with the change in the autumn's scent...then making it visually rich with the 'greying field' or 'the rising gloom beyond the mountain'...it was a wonderful read:2thumbs:

 

You were so nice to take time to comment on these older poems. Autumn is all about change in temperature, air, light, rain...so much change. Our bodies notice it, too. Thanks for reading!

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