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    Parker Owens
  • Parker Owens
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  • 05/11/2017
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Occasional Poetry - 67. Hospital Visit

Impressions from a difficult visit. There are probably mistakes. I shall have to live with that.

Pale, translucent skin
drawn across ancient cheekbones
belies a live mind.

Blue eyes, bright with tears
recall a lifetime of love,
laughter and blessing.

Warm hands, still holding,
brief, whispered words caressing,
promise forever.

If these move you, I would love to know about it. Thanks.
Copyright © 2017 Parker Owens; All Rights Reserved.
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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Valkyrie
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I think you captured the moment perfectly.  You reminded me of when my grandmother was in the same situation.  Nice job. :hug::kiss:  

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Mikiesboy

There are no mistakes Parker .. not with these. They break my heart...all the strength i can spare plus more i send your way my friend. It's never easy. much love xoxo

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Okiegrad

Recall a lifetime of love.....that line is so important.  Whatever else life throws at us, it's the love we remember most.  Loving, and being loved...a beautiful feeling.   Thank you for sharing!!

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AC Benus

they moved me very much

 

put me in a similar room, long ago now, saying farewell to my father 

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Parker Owens
9 hours ago, Valkyrie said:

I think you captured the moment perfectly.  You reminded me of when my grandmother was in the same situation.  Nice job. :hug::kiss:  

 

These distilled several long days in a tiny dimly lit hospital room. They are like snapshots, perhaps. Thank you so much.

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9 hours ago, Mikiesboy said:

There are no mistakes Parker .. not with these. They break my heart...all the strength i can spare plus more i send your way my friend. It's never easy. much love xoxo

 

No, go, this us not an easy experience to distill into words. But maybe they help to ease the ache, and remind me of the love that remains. Thank you for your care and strength.

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9 hours ago, Okiegrad said:

Recall a lifetime of love.....that line is so important.  Whatever else life throws at us, it's the love we remember most.  Loving, and being loved...a beautiful feeling.   Thank you for sharing!!

 

If anything can be recalled from this visit, it is the love, recollected with every quiet breath, every beep of medical machinery, every twitch of a finger. Thank you for reading and responding to these. 

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8 hours ago, AC Benus said:

they moved me very much

 

put me in a similar room, long ago now, saying farewell to my father 

 

Thank you for reading these. Such farewells and partings tear at the soul, sear the spirit. 

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Parker Owens
4 hours ago, Lux Apollo said:

:,(

 

(In a good way)

 

I am grateful you read these. They were hard to distill.

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MacGreg

Whether in a hospital room, in a hospice room, in a bedroom, or anywhere, being witness to a life expiring is heartbreaking. You captured the sentiment. I'm sorry for your loss.

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Parker Owens
On 5/11/2017 at 11:41 PM, MacGreg said:

Whether in a hospital room, in a hospice room, in a bedroom, or anywhere, being witness to a life expiring is heartbreaking. You captured the sentiment. I'm sorry for your loss.

 

It is like an unraveling, an unwinding. It is so very hard to be there. Thanks for your comment and kindness.

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Parker Owens
8 minutes ago, mayday said:

brought tears to my eyes

 

Then perhaps you were there with me; for my own eyes couldn't hold back...

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mayday
1 hour ago, Parker Owens said:

 

Then perhaps you were there with me; for my own eyes couldn't hold back...

stop all the clocks

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