*Sneak Peek* Changes: Sneak Peek

[Mikiesboy]

Hi!  This a short excerpt from the first chapter of my next story called Changes. It's about Don and Louis, together 10 years, married for part of that time, very devoted to each other. Don is a writer and a lover of his husband but also of danger. Life is good until one day ... 

 

The racetrack that day was noisy and oily. The fumes gave me a headache. I felt irritated and wanted to be anywhere but there, but Don had asked me to go, and I didn’t feel like I could say no. In the pit area, I sat watching him and his crew doing last minute adjustments to the bike. I was such a fish out of water.

 

But Don didn’t care. I was his husband, and he was not afraid to show this in front of others as he often ran up to talk or kiss me. Finally, Don went to change into his leathers, leaving me with a black feeling of doom.   

 

If I’d gotten up and gone with him, and told him how I felt—that maybe today was not a good day to get on that killing machine—that maybe he’d have listened. In my heart-of-hearts though, I know he wouldn’t have.      

 

No, instead, he would do what he did. Hold me in his strong arms, kiss me until I was breathless, and tell me he’d love me forevermore. I’d smile and act bravely, cheering him on, but scared until the damn race was over.   

   

It happened in the fifth lap. They don’t really know what caused the accident; can’t tell me the whys, only that it was an act of God.

 

Do we blame God for everything bad that happens?

 

I see it every day in my head; it was just after a right turn. The bike leaning, and Don’s right knee so close to the track. It was too close, wasn’t it? The physics were instantly wrong, so that massive machine slid out from under him, and Don becoming a ragdoll as he flipped repeatedly, bouncing off the guardrail and hay bales. The ambulance screamed its way over the park-like grass in the centre of the track.

 

I wanted to go. I needed to go. But I was held in place, as Jed’s hands were on both my biceps while I tried to climb the barrier; his grip was like Don’s.

 

Jed, the crew chief, had grabbed my face and turned it toward his. It was loud, so we all wore ear protectors, and I remember the shape of his mouth as he yelled at me; NO, NO, NO! He pulled me inside the small crew’s lounge. I fought him because this room was not where I was supposed to be. He pulled off our protectors and said, “No, Louis. We can’t help him. Let the paramedics sort him out.”

 

“He’s my fucking husband!” I didn’t try to stop my tears.

 

Jed pulled me close and held me in arms that felt so like Don’s, and he whispered, “I know. I know.”

 

All I could do then was grab fistfuls of his overalls and sob.

 

Jed drove me to the hospital. Terror was in my fingers during that ride and I dug them into my thighs and the padded door handle.

 

Don was in surgery by the time Jed led me to the Emergency Room, where he remained for several hours. I called Don’s mother Rena, who lived in Calgary. I felt I needed a plunger to push down my feelings as I told her what had happened to her son. I knew she was crying as she said she would be here as soon as she could.

 

That was nearly three weeks ago. Don has not woken up; he has not moved, he has not smiled or cried, or said: Baby I love you.

 

Not for three weeks.

 

I think I have no more tears, but today, with time passing me by, I sob.

 

My ‘you’ve got a text’ ringtone roused me from my self-pity and daydreams. I picked up my phone, rolled onto my back and opened it:

 

He’s awake

Edited May 23, 2017 by Mikiesboy

[Defiance19]

A good sneak tim... This feels like it's going to be an emotional journey. I was relieved to see a positive text.  But, what now. Look forward to finding out. 

Great! xo

[hohochan657]

O M G ...  I'm hooked, just reel me in tim ...  

 

but I'd better get back to my cramming ... luckily you haven't started to post it yet ... 

[clochette]

My, my, my!!! I hesitate before reading the sneak peak, curious to know every little bits possible after all the hints you've given us knowing I'd want more or knowing it was there and the wait would be arrrg!!! In the end here I am but Damm if I want more. MORE! 

Right from the start you've managed to pull us right into the action, waiting for news with Louis. It promises to be an emotional rollercoaster and I'm already hook.

Edited May 23, 2017 by clochette

[Parker Owens]

tim, you cannot make me wait too long until this posts. I think

maybe five minutes is a reasonable waiting period. Really. I am hooked. Great snippet. 

[northie]

Of course,  you have to leave us with a cliffie ...

[Former Member]

Wow, what a start. I apologize, but I have to say it: Stop fidget, sit down, write and get this story done!!! 

Honestly, that will become something really magnificent. I am looking forward to it and wait patiently for however this will take you to finish. .... Ok maybe not to patiently but definitely curious and excited.

Thank you for this sneak peek!!!

xoxoxo Sis

[Mikiesboy]

Just now, Lyssa said:

Wow, what a start. I apologize, but I have to say it: Stop fidget, sit down, write and get this story done!!! 

Honestly, that will become something really magnificent. I am looking forward to it and wait patiently for however this will take you to finish. .... Ok maybe not to patiently but definitely curious and excited.

Thank you for this sneak peek!!!

xoxoxo Sis

10 chapters done ... 2 more to go. Ill try to stop fidgeting 

[Former Member]

4 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

10 chapters done ... 2 more to go. Ill try to stop fidgeting 

I know. Sending love and hugs and kiss. Lyssa

[William King]

Exciting peek, got me wondering about what happens next.

 

Question for you: you call it a racetrack, is that North American, we refer to cars and bikes racing on a circuit? I have a picture of an open circuit, like in a grand prix, is that it? Language - I thought we all spoke English, LOL!

 

[Mikiesboy]

On 5/23/2017 at 11:15 AM, William King said:

Exciting peek, got me wondering about what happens next.

 

Question for you: you call it a racetrack, is that North American, we refer to cars and bikes racing on a circuit? I have a picture of an open circuit, like in a grand prix, is that it? Language - I thought we all spoke English, LOL!

 

We do speak English but that doesn't mean we refer to things the same way.  Here it's a race track or track, the circuit would be the 10 races that happen every year. So they'd be on the circuit to compete in all ten races. 

Edited May 24, 2017 by Mikiesboy

[Brayon]

I am looking forward to more of this story. Excellent work Tim!

[Timothy M.]

3 hours ago, northie said:

Of course,  you have to leave us with a cliffie ...

 

I was going to say I'm so relieved tim included the last sentence. Then at least there's hope. I'd have worried about him being left behind if not for that 'cliffie.'

[FormerMember4]

 I'm certainly looking forward to more tim. So many ways this story could go. I'm very curious which path you will take. 

[Bucket1]

Nicely done... but I want more

 

[Reader1810]

Great start, tim. I like the MCs already and am looking forward to reading more about them. 

 

As for the cliffie ending? It was that, but it came with a ray of hope. 

 

Nicely done, my friend.

[Hudson Bartholomew]

Oooo.... I'm hooked. Have to admit I was worried there for a second. If Don had died...   But he didn't!! Yay! Can't wait to read this!

[dughlas]

Ohhhhh shite little brother! This is good, this is really fecking good.

Edited May 24, 2017 by dughlas

[Mikiesboy]

On 5/23/2017 at 6:53 AM, Defiance19 said:

A good sneak tim... This feels like it's going to be an emotional journey. I was relieved to see a positive text.  But, what now. Look forward to finding out. 

Great! xo

yeah it is a bit emotional.. my desire was for this to be real.. i hope i manage it

[Mikiesboy]

On 5/23/2017 at 7:06 AM, hohochan657 said:

O M G ...  I'm hooked, just reel me in tim ...  

 

but I'd better get back to my cramming ... luckily you haven't started to post it yet ... 

thank you hoho!

[Mikiesboy]

On 5/23/2017 at 7:09 AM, clochette said:

My, my, my!!! I hesitate before reading the sneak peak, curious to know every little bits possible after all the hints you've given us knowing I'd want more or knowing it was there and the wait would be arrrg!!! In the end here I am but Damm if I want more. MORE! 

Right from the start you've managed to pull us right into the action, waiting for news with Louis. It promises to be an emotional rollercoaster and I'm already hook.

thank you clo!!

[Mikiesboy]

On 5/23/2017 at 7:38 AM, Parker Owens said:

tim, you cannot make me wait too long until this posts. I think

maybe five minutes is a reasonable waiting period. Really. I am hooked. Great snippet. 

i will be as quick as i can be xo

[Mikiesboy]

On 5/23/2017 at 8:13 AM, northie said:

Of course,  you have to leave us with a cliffie ...

thanks northie.. hard not too really.

[Mikiesboy]

On 5/23/2017 at 8:25 AM, Lyssa said:

Wow, what a start. I apologize, but I have to say it: Stop fidget, sit down, write and get this story done!!! 

Honestly, that will become something really magnificent. I am looking forward to it and wait patiently for however this will take you to finish. .... Ok maybe not to patiently but definitely curious and excited.

Thank you for this sneak peek!!!

xoxoxo Sis

i will try to finish very soon ... AC is ready to edit .. 

[Former Member]

Just now, Mikiesboy said:

i will try to finish very soon ... AC is ready to edit .. 

Great!!!!