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Occasional Poetry - 31. Planetary Motion and Aspiration

em>I made all of the mistakes you might find here, every one of them. I claim full responsibility. Just not the blame.
Planetary Motion
 
Observe the planets spin around the sun
in orbits just eccentric as they run
their almost, but not quite, co-planar ways
which Brahae found so elegantly fun.
 
The stars, the moon, the planets in their phase
shine brilliantly, set midnight all ablaze,
predictable by mathematic laws
which all our fevered study so repays.
 
But in the universal wonderment I pause:
Copernicus and Kepler had their flaws,
though geniuses of observation, who
Synodic orbits found to great applause.
 
I do not say their wisdom is untrue;
around the sun we go, in paths askew,
and yet I know before the world begun,
my heart, my mind, my spirit circle you.
 
 
 
Aspiration
 
I'd like to be a house for you,
with wide verandahs and a view,
a home where you retreat and rest
and your vitality renew.
 
Walk through my rooms, my honored guest,
and furnish them with chair and chest,
for I would be your shelter sure,
within the alcove of my breast.
 
Let love's foundation here secure
your home as long as we endure,
and in my attic, pictures hide
to keep our recollections pure.
 
Ascend my stairs, and open wide
a bedroom where you may abide,
for sleep or play or love so true,
with me forever by your side.
 
em>If what I wrote is bugging you, don't be shy, leave a review.
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Parker Owens
On 06/29/2016 04:14 AM, Valkyrie said:

I like how you meld the spiritual with the scientific at the end of the first one. Can I guess this is a topic you learned about at your conference? lol I didn't understand a lot of it, since I am not really a math person, but enjoyed regardless. The second one was just lovely :)

You guessed correctly at the source of my inspiration. Glad you liked Planetary Motion, though. Aspiration is lovely, and the first line just appeared one day, quite unannounced. Thanks so much for your comments.

Parker Owens
On 06/29/2016 06:47 AM, aditus said:

And if I like it? What should I do? Maybe leave a review too?

I am fascinated by everything planet, Keppler and Co., but I loved 'Aspiration'.

You like them? Thank you so much! Glad you liked Planetary Motion, which seemed to write itself one afternoon. Aspiration took longer, but felt so good to write. If you loved it, then I feel successful.

Parker Owens
On 06/29/2016 07:28 AM, skinnydragon said:

Two lovely verses about, love.

 

The first, to me, was an enshrinement of its eternal nature--from before time itself.

 

The second, Aspiration.

And, as aspiration, it is a deep breath of an offer, nearly irresistible, to embrace, becalm and love.

 

Terrific stuff, Parker!!

Thank you for your kind words. Somehow, I still find things to write about love. I have the feeling I will for a long time to come. Aspiration weighed so much on my mind, I had to write it out. You determined the nature of Planetary Motion correctly. I am glad you liked them!

Parker Owens
On 06/29/2016 10:07 AM, Headstall said:

Loved Aspiration, Parker. A beautiful theme, beautifully done... I felt the welcome delivered. I admit to getting a little lost in the first one, but found myself in the final verse... cheers... Gary....

I fear I get caught up in the sheer joy of writing poetry about unusual topics, as I surely did in Planetary Motion. But I am happy you found your place in the end. Aspiration's first line wouldn't let me go. Honestly, it reminded me of one of your stories. I am so happy you liked both of them.

AC Benus

I'm fascinated by the first one. With the final 'you' being altered to a 'You,' and removed from the context of the second poem, I could be content to think it's a poem about God and the forces of spirit being the true animus behind planetary motion. Thus the math will eternally miss something.

 

The second one is lovely! But now that I look it in context with the first, perhaps it can be thought of as love of You too.

 

Both of them are very accomplished; like fine Scotch, they go down with a pleasant tingle, and only afterwards hit you with a punch.

 

Bravo!

Parker Owens
On 07/01/2016 08:49 AM, AC Benus said:

I'm fascinated by the first one. With the final 'you' being altered to a 'You,' and removed from the context of the second poem, I could be content to think it's a poem about God and the forces of spirit being the true animus behind planetary motion. Thus the math will eternally miss something.

 

The second one is lovely! But now that I look it in context with the first, perhaps it can be thought of as love of You too.

 

Both of them are very accomplished; like fine Scotch, they go down with a pleasant tingle, and only afterwards hit you with a punch.

 

Bravo!

Fine scotch, indeed. Your observation about one single change to upper case is adroit and fascinating. I did not see God in animus to planetary motion, rather the mistaken adherents of poor translations of Ptolemy, who did not insist on geocentrism. You make me wonder about the subconscious in your comments on Aspiration, and you are possibly right. The accomplishment in either one is that you feel responsive to them. You are most kind, and I am all ablush.

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