timmy's poetry - 1. Tubes

I know the feeling you describe perfectly here ... yeah, like being stuck in a tube. I'm glad you have that one to help you move again.

This is a really well-crafted poem, imo. The last stanza breaks the tension and comes like the relief being described.

Have felt this way, too. You describe it well: crawling up your legs, enveloping you. Gets difficult to move by then. It's good to have someone - or something - that can pull you free of it.

Superb poem, tim. I get the feeling you describe. There are times I feel paralyzed, bombarded, powerless... you've captured that eloquently. I love how you ended it, because no matter how it is achieved, we must keep climbing out. Bless Michael, and what you two share. Much love and respect xoxoxo

Paralyzed by uncertainty......perfect description of the fight that goes on in our minds and souls some days. I'm so glad you've found someone to alleviate that uncertainty. Now, his love is a certainty on which you can assuredly rest!!

I ditto everyone else. This is a beautiful poem, Tim.

I've been there. We probably all have at one time or another. You're lucky though; you have Michael to pull you out of that tube.

A very good poem. How gifted you are, to have the talent of expressing the feelings so clearly and artfully.
I agree with the others, we all have been there from time to time. But hey the darkness didn´t won all, we are still here.
Hugs Lyssa

You have written so effectively here. I can feel the constrictions and the inescapable trap closing in. The third stanza was very powerful for me; the circular keep is an image and metaphor with so many connections and connotations. That the poet found hope and escape gave me great relief.

On 12/14/2016 02:36 PM, AC Benus said:

I know the feeling you describe perfectly here ... yeah, like being stuck in a tube. I'm glad you have that one to help you move again.

 

This is a really well-crafted poem, imo. The last stanza breaks the tension and comes like the relief being described.

Thanks AC. Well you gave me the push to write this. I'm lucky that have I such a wonderful supportive bunch of people around me. I often don't see me sliding, and it takes guts to tell me i am. I'm glad you feel the last stanza works, i wasn't too sure.

thanks again xoxo

tim

On 12/13/2016 at 10:57 PM, Reader1810 said:

It may be a cliche, but the powerful that is love really does conquer all...

Beautifully done tim.  

Thank you Reader!! You're right of course.. love is a powerful thing.

xoxo tim

On 12/14/2016 02:58 PM, MacGreg said:

Have felt this way, too. You describe it well: crawling up your legs, enveloping you. Gets difficult to move by then. It's good to have someone - or something - that can pull you free of it.

Yeah it is good have people around you who will tell you that you're sliding away. I'm lucky i do and they are brave enough to, i get pretty miserable pretty quickly.

Thanks for reading .. don't know why but i didn't think you were the poetry type...

tim xo

On 12/14/2016 03:53 PM, Headstall said:

Superb poem, tim. I get the feeling you describe. There are times I feel paralyzed, bombarded, powerless... you've captured that eloquently. I love how you ended it, because no matter how it is achieved, we must keep climbing out. Bless Michael, and what you two share. Much love and respect xoxoxo

Hey Gary ... I guess everyone does sometimes. Pretty classic symptoms of depression and 'down-in-the-dumpitis'. You're right, when you are down there, there's only up.

thanks Gary xoxo

On 12/14/2016 04:18 PM, Okiegrad said:

Paralyzed by uncertainty......perfect description of the fight that goes on in our minds and souls some days. I'm so glad you've found someone to alleviate that uncertainty. Now, his love is a certainty on which you can assuredly rest!!

That's very true. I'm pretty flexible, but major changes can throw me for a loop...takes a day or so to get over em. I've got a wonderful husband and family and friends who care about me. I'm very lucky. Thanks for reading ..

On 12/14/2016 04:34 PM, Lisa said:

I ditto everyone else. This is a beautiful poem, Tim.

 

I've been there. We probably all have at one time or another. You're lucky though; you have Michael to pull you out of that tube.

Hi Lisa!! Thanks for reading. Yeah i'm lucky... i've got lots of support.

thanks again for reading.. i really appreciate it xoxoxo

On 12/15/2016 01:25 AM, Lyssa said:

A very good poem. How gifted you are, to have the talent of expressing the feelings so clearly and artfully.

I agree with the others, we all have been there from time to time. But hey the darkness didn´t won all, we are still here.

Hugs Lyssa

Lyssa.. thank you for the compliment. I appreciate it. and you're right, the dark will not win, people need to reach out to each other, a helping hand doesn't cost much. I'm lucky to have that support .. i hope you are too. I love the pic on your avatar..

tim xo

On 12/15/2016 02:04 AM, Parker Owens said:

You have written so effectively here. I can feel the constrictions and the inescapable trap closing in. The third stanza was very powerful for me; the circular keep is an image and metaphor with so many connections and connotations. That the poet found hope and escape gave me great relief.

Thanks Parker. The poet is a very lucky guy to have great friends and family who help me in spite of myself. I liked circular keep myself.. thanks so much xoxo

hugs tim

On 12/15/2016 03:07 AM, Bucket1 said:

Thank you, B!!!

xoxo

I think we have all felt despair and loneliness. It is a sad sick to your stomach feeling. Yet it is how one copes with it that is the key. What we do to not let it become the center of our being. How do we fight it off that is the question?  

5 hours ago, Jon Jon said:

I think we have all felt despair and loneliness. It is a sad sick to your stomach feeling. Yet it is how one copes with it that is the key. What we do to not let it become the center of our being. How do we fight it off that is the question?  

i'm sure you're right. Do you have to fight it? Can everyone? Mental illness can't necessarily be fought off. It is not just 'having a bad day'. i do battle my own mental illness, with meds and therapy and a good psychiatrist but there is no easy answer.

We need to stop being afraid of it. We also need to stop thinking that people who genuinely suffer are weak, lazy or just want attention because that is far from the truth or reality.

But there are things that help and what each sufferer needs depends on the scope of their own issue.  There's no cure. There's acceptance, understanding and consideration. There's no vaccine for this and we each need to find our way.

Thanks for your comments. They are appreciated.