timmy's poetry - 59. Chapter 59 Space

so empty. so sad. 

23 minutes ago, AC Benus said:

They are a great storytelling collection. Very vivid and packed with relatable sorrow and hope. Nice prompt   

Thank you very much AC... and for givin' em the once over xo

24 minutes ago, mogwhy said:

so empty. so sad. 

thank you, moggy 

13 minutes ago, mollyhousemouse said:

very nice, tim!

 

the middle two lines of the first one...well i hate crowds, they are my kryptonite, i can feel the press of many bodies, and can hear the din of all those voices, makes me shudder a bit

 

the second one could be the opening sequence of a space movie, the lonely space explorer, looking out the window, the camera pans out and there are more people but

 

                                           Though we are together in this, we are still each of us alone

                                           Ahead of us is a life of new chances; it’s a future unknown

 

 

and the third one, what a choice to have to make, to go to a new place, but leave a loved one behind!

that last stanza is just heartbreaking!  especially the last line....

 

                                                 

                                                      Farewell now, you who I miss

                                                     Always I will treasure your final kiss

                                                     Life here, we will make right

                                                     And of you, one day, I’ll no longer reminisce.

 

nicely done!

 

 

(full disclosure....yes, i'm tim's beta reader, but i did not see these before he posted them here.)

 

 

 

 

Thanks molly ... i appreciate it.  glad you enjoyed them,  i am both sorry and glad that the first one gave you the creeps. 

15 minutes ago, Reader1810 said:

Wow...impressed, I am. So true this is not your usual repertoire. No matter, you own these words, and the tale they tell. 

Well done tim, well done! 

Thank you, Reader. I appreciate it and i'm glad you enjoyed them.

6 minutes ago, BlindAmbition said:

These are beautiful. Not your norm, but totally your voice. Very relatable with emotions of loneliness, sadness, and hope. I’m glad you found a challenge in the prompt. You nailed these tim.

Thank you, jp. I'm glad they worked for you. It was fun doing something different. Thanks for reading them, jp. xoxo

Duty, love,  loneliness, adventure, new worlds and old and overcrowding. All these make for three wonderful poems. Well done, boy.

6 hours ago, MichaelS36 said:

Duty, love,  loneliness, adventure, new worlds and old and overcrowding. All these make for three wonderful poems. Well done, boy.

thank You, MIchael xo

Three lovely poems tim. I like that they lean into each other. Variations on a theme. 

Very well done... 

An interesting departure from your usual work and yet not so different. The space theme is a change but the way you embrace is very much tim. Love, longing, separation are common threads among the cloth you weave. Nicely done.

you did an excellent job stepping out of your comfort zone to compose poems about what lies out there in the universe, as opposed to man's struggles here on earth. And yet, these poems evoke some of those same struggles: fighting for survival, fighting for something to call your own, fighting for love, seeking something brighter in the world than what we've been given. Despair and hope. Loss and gain. Great poems, tim.

(On a side note, I happened to be listening to this song when I read these poems, and it was extremely apropos: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iJD1pV5JKng.)

11 hours ago, Defiance19 said:

Three lovely poems tim. I like that they lean into each other. Variations on a theme. 

Very well done... 

thank you very much, Def.  it was a prompt i found. space 

11 hours ago, dughlas said:

An interesting departure from your usual work and yet not so different. The space theme is a change but the way you embrace is very much tim. Love, longing, separation are common threads among the cloth you weave. Nicely done.

i guess i can't change my spots.. lol... thanks for reading dugh and your comments xo

2 hours ago, MacGreg said:

you did an excellent job stepping out of your comfort zone to compose poems about what lies out there in the universe, as opposed to man's struggles here on earth. And yet, these poems evoke some of those same struggles: fighting for survival, fighting for something to call your own, fighting for love, seeking something brighter in the world than what we've been given. Despair and hope. Loss and gain. Great poems, tim.

 

(On a side note, I happened to be listening to this song when I read these poems, and it was extremely apropos: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iJD1pV5JKng.)

 

i suppose it doesnt matter where we go, there are things about ourselves we can never truly change. oh.. that's a good song, Sir .. thank You for including the link xo