tim's Bits and Pieces - 34. Traitorous Mind and Shards

Traitorous Mind - Hits very close to home. Your words sum up how I feel at times.

Both poems are excellent, tim. I get the visual from Traitorous Mind immediately with just the first few words. Shards reminds me of someone who is longing for someone and harkens back to two of your earlier poems, A Walk on the Riverbank and Forevermore.

6 minutes ago, BHopper2 said:

Traitorous Mind - Hits very close to home. Your words sum up how I feel at times.

 

Both poems are excellent, tim. I get the visual from Traitorous Mind immediately with just the first few words. Shards reminds me of someone who is longing for someone and harkens back to two of your earlier poems, A Walk on the Riverbank and Forevermore.

yeah, well you suffer as i do, so the first would touch you .. and yes Shards is related to Forevermore, as you noted.

Your poetry is always equal parts moving and brilliant. Thank you for sharing your gift with us 

These poems move me. Traitorous Mind made me think of the masks we wear in order to hide. You write about this only too well. Shards really got to me - maybe it was all those images of brokenness, and the sounds I hear with them. I’m grateful you shared these. Thank you. 

The first poem is very moving, tim. you made some tough choices last week, but they will benefit you in the long run. As for the second poem... well, I don't believe you'd shatter, but if you did, rest assured you'd be pieced back together.

3 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

I’m glad writing this down helps you, tim. 

 

See with your mind’s eye: I am holding your hand. 

 

The sun is shining brightly: bask in its rays, my friend. 

 

 

Thanks Reader i'm okay.. honestly. xo

49 minutes ago, AC Benus said:

Your poetry is always equal parts moving and brilliant. Thank you for sharing your gift with us 

thank you AC and thanks for your suggestions for the first one... xoxo

39 minutes ago, Parker Owens said:

These poems move me. Traitorous Mind made me think of the masks we wear in order to hide. You write about this only too well. Shards really got to me - maybe it was all those images of brokenness, and the sounds I hear with them. I’m grateful you shared these. Thank you. 

thanks Parker... interesting take on the first ... i love the images people get from poetry.  thanks for reading them xo

10 minutes ago, MacGreg said:

The first poem is very moving, tim. you made some tough choices last week, but they will benefit you in the long run. As for the second poem... well, I don't believe you'd shatter, but if you did, rest assured you'd be pieced back together.

i am feeling better Sir, unless i get over tired.  about the second ... maybe Sir, things can break too often ...thanks for reading and for Your comments Sir xoxo

I always enjoy reading what you write. It is sometimes happy, more often sad, and always thought provoking. Your first poem is clever, and I sympathize with the feelings. I don't know about the second one. I don't really know you, but I'd like to think you wouldn't shatter. And if you did, there are a lot of people who care about you and love you who would bring glue. Thanks for sharing.

5 hours ago, JeffreyL said:

I always enjoy reading what you write. It is sometimes happy, more often sad, and always thought provoking. Your first poem is clever, and I sympathize with the feelings. I don't know about the second one. I don't really know you, but I'd like to think you wouldn't shatter. And if you did, there are a lot of people who care about you and love you who would bring glue. Thanks for sharing.

thanks Jeffrey .. i hope i can write some more hopeful stuff.. sometimes what i feel is so strong i feel like glass, like if anyone touches me i'd just break.. but i'd appreciate you coming to help with your pot of glue xoxo

The first one rings very true to me. And all of that gets so internalised that even talking about it feels like you're just ruining it for everyone else. Whining. Feels like that. Still, no matter how much pain and suffering you portray in your work, there is always so much beauty in it. Reminds me a lot of this song by Frou Frou... Let Go. Or, the hook in the chorus, anyway. It's all right cause there's beauty in the breakdown. For me, at least, there is something comforting about turning pain into art. Both when I try to do it for myself, and when I see others do the same, especially with similar experiences. I hope it does something similar for you. 

2 minutes ago, Thorn Wilde said:

The first one rings very true to me. And all of that gets so internalised that even talking about it feels like you're just ruining it for everyone else. Whining. Feels like that. Still, no matter how much pain and suffering you portray in your work, there is always so much beauty in it. Reminds me a lot of this song by Frou Frou... Let Go. Or, the hook in the chorus, anyway. It's all right cause there's beauty in the breakdown. For me, at least, there is something comforting about turning pain into art. Both when I try to do it for myself, and when I see others do the same, especially with similar experiences. I hope it does something similar for you. 

i write poetry because i love it and because it helps me understand the world and i guess my reaction to it. like my signature says:  poetry is how i write my world.

i like that, Thorn, thanks for sharing that...  It's all right cause there's beauty in the breakdown.   I suppose there is or it becomes beauty, later.  i think a lot of poets write to solve things, and to sort out their world and feelings.

Luckily sometimes it's pleasant and fun, or even downright silly .. i have managed a few of those, too.  Thanks for reading this and for you very thoughtful comments, they are spot on. xo

4 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

i write poetry because i love it and because it helps me understand the world and i guess my reaction to it. like my signature says:  poetry is how i write my world.

 

i like that, Thorn, thanks for sharing that...  It's all right cause there's beauty in the breakdown.   I suppose there is or it becomes beauty, later.  i think a lot of poets write to solve things, and to sort out their world and feelings.

 

Luckily sometimes it's pleasant and fun, or even downright silly .. i have managed a few of those, too.  Thanks for reading this and for you very thoughtful comments, they are spot on. xo

 

Here's the song, if you'd like to hear it:

Love you little brother.

8 hours ago, dughlas said:

Love you little brother.

love you too, dugh xo

You're doing the right thing, boy. Better this way. And the rest .... you'd get through it.