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    Headstall
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Headstall's Reflections - 10. Chapter 10- Prompt 5- Rhyming Couplets- Climbing Out

Just a poem....

Headstall's Reflections

 

 

Chapter 10- Climbing Out

 

 

The ache of my soul comes not from pain

But from desperation when my spirits wane

Buried voices cry out to me

I reject them all for their memory

 

Malaise is something I’ve dabbled in

Held at bay by my need to win

Emptiness grows and I make my stand

Though I’m frightened to dive for fear I won’t land

 

Out, damned rot, I gave you my all

Yet you back away when I start to fall

Alone in our prison we sometimes are

It’s not only our surface we tend to mar

 

I hunt for something I cannot see

The minutiae of life is swallowing me

To count on others doesn’t always make sense

Sanity requires I maintain my own fence

 

Right foot, left foot, don’t look back

Enough time there, let it fade to black

I guess 'happy' will be for another day.
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Mikiesboy

Glad you're still fighting it Gary.. hot cross buns with lots of glaze is what you need.!!
Great poem .. never give up. Not that I think you would.

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Emi GS

We trust our Loved one and believe them for life. When the trust broken, we can't cope up that easily. This is a good poem and the line 'You back away when I start to fall' moved me.

 

Nice poem Gary. I hope you stand for your broken trust/heart.

 

Love,
~Emi.

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Parker Owens

Agreed with Emi that 'You back away when I start to fall' spoke to me. Also the 'minutiae of life swallowing me' relates to my experience. This poem as a whole reached into my gut and turned it...dabbling in malaise is more than suitable a description for the experience. I continue to hope for your successful climb out.

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LitLover

This made made me sad, but hopeful. There was sadness and disillusionment with someone who is supposed to care, but definite strength and determination here.

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Headstall
On 03/20/2016 05:17 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Glad you're still fighting it Gary.. hot cross buns with lots of glaze is what you need.!!

Great poem .. never give up. Not that I think you would.

Thanks, tim. lol... maybe you're right. :) . Thanks for the review... and I never give up... cheers, my friend... Gary...

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Headstall
On 03/20/2016 05:45 AM, Emi GS said:

We trust our Loved one and believe them for life. When the trust broken, we can't cope up that easily. This is a good poem and the line 'You back away when I start to fall' moved me.

 

Nice poem Gary. I hope you stand for your broken trust/heart.

 

Love,

~Emi.

Disappointment in others is one of the hardest things for me... I don't like feeling that way... thank you for pointing out that line, and thank you for reviewing... it means a lot... cheers... Gary...

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Headstall
On 03/20/2016 05:59 AM, Parker Owens said:

Agreed with Emi that 'You back away when I start to fall' spoke to me. Also the 'minutiae of life swallowing me' relates to my experience. This poem as a whole reached into my gut and turned it...dabbling in malaise is more than suitable a description for the experience. I continue to hope for your successful climb out.

Thanks, Parker. I'm glad you could relate to the words. I guess is my therapy... thanks for the review, my friend... cheers... Gary....

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Headstall
On 03/21/2016 02:28 AM, LitLover said:

This made made me sad, but hopeful. There was sadness and disillusionment with someone who is supposed to care, but definite strength and determination here.

Yeah, I'm not in the best place, but I'll be fine. Thank you for the review, my dear friend... cheers... Gary....

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Aviana

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Another amazing poem sir...it feels like your words speak...even though in the starting I felt the hesitancy n the loss of trust  still as I progressed I sensed the will to fight and determination to win in it! 

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Headstall

Thanks, Aviana! You got the gist of it. No matter how hard, I am determined. We have to be. There is too much in this world to live for. I love your comments... they mean much... cheers... Gary....

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