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Headstall's Reflections - 5. Chapter 5- Succinct Journey

I have no idea what form this is, but I'll call it 'Fill in the Blanks'

Headstall’s Reflections

 

 

Chapter 5- Succinct Journey

 

 

Loneliness… insidious

Pervasive… invasive

Isolation… desolation

Rejected… dejected

Aching… breaking

Mourn… scorn

Guessing… stressing

Questioning… wrestling

Complaining… refraining

Envision… derision

Reflect… deflect

Alone… atone

Mope… cope

Despair… nowhere

Fright… fight

Breakdown… takedown

Morose… verbose

Sorrow… tomorrow

Evolving... solving

Revealing… healing

Release… peace

Facing… embracing

Living… giving

Striving… thriving

Surviving… arriving

A tumble of emotions with a desire not to dwell... made perfect sense at the time :unsure:

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I liked it Gary! :) It was a seemingly long, yet short and sweet, journey. And the final word "arriving" was so fitting.

 

Thanks for this wonderful poem Gary! :hug:

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Bah :heart: :heart: likeless again!!
Gary this sounds like you're exorcising demons - forcing them out by writing them out. But Fill in the Blanks works too. And for you, this is very different, I like it, it's different and I hope it works.
tim

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You do have a way with words... even if it's two words at a time. Each pair meant something... a different aspect of life and coping. I have no idea what form it is... I don't particularly care. I just truly enjoyed it.

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Interesting reflection Gary
I was reading it and thought of ink blots. You remember those...see the ink blot and say what it reminds you of...usually the first thing you think of.
Thats what I thought of here. One word (thought) led to the one beside it.
Strange thought process, I know, but that is where my brain went so I'm sticking with it.

 

I will say one thing for you Gary, you are a big thinker- that is a compliment by the way. :)

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I love how you used the word association to reflect on your journey. Different is good and whatever form you choose to call it, it works. The meaning and feelings is clear in the connection of the words chosen. You manage yet again to strike a chord in me Gary..
I think it's brill.. (The kids still say that?) xo

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An original way of giving your thoughts during a journey a place. There are several pairs that are food for reflection in itself and could well serve as writing prompts. Much room for filling in the blanks. A lovely poem, Gary. Thanks.

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On 01/25/2016 06:47 AM, Drew Espinosa said:

I liked it Gary! :) It was a seemingly long, yet short and sweet, journey. And the final word "arriving" was so fitting.

 

Thanks for this wonderful poem Gary! :hug:

Thank you, Drew. I'm glad you liked it. Surprisingly, it took very little time for these word combinations to coalesce in my weird brain... I appreciate the review... cheers... Gary...

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On 01/25/2016 06:51 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Bah :heart: :heart: likeless again!!

Gary this sounds like you're exorcising demons - forcing them out by writing them out. But Fill in the Blanks works too. And for you, this is very different, I like it, it's different and I hope it works.

tim

Thanks, tim. In a way, I was... and it is different for me, but it made perfect sense to me. I wondered if any would see the journey I was writing... it seems to have worked somewhat... I appreciate the review... cheers... Gary...

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On 01/25/2016 06:52 AM, LitLover said:

You do have a way with words... even if it's two words at a time. Each pair meant something... a different aspect of life and coping. I have no idea what form it is... I don't particularly care. I just truly enjoyed it.

Thanks, Lit. You're right... it's not the form that matters... it's whether you can get people to feel something, even if it's different from what you feel. Thanks for a great review... cheers... Gary...

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On 01/25/2016 06:54 AM, Reader1810 said:

Interesting reflection Gary

I was reading it and thought of ink blots. You remember those...see the ink blot and say what it reminds you of...usually the first thing you think of.

Thats what I thought of here. One word (thought) led to the one beside it.

Strange thought process, I know, but that is where my brain went so I'm sticking with it.

 

I will say one thing for you Gary, you are a big thinker- that is a compliment by the way. :)

Thanks, Reader. I kind of get that. My goal is always to stimulate thought, which is what an ink blot does. And I do take 'big thinker' as a compliment. Thanks for a thoughtful review, my friend... cheers... Gary...

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On 01/25/2016 07:52 AM, Defiance19 said:

I love how you used the word association to reflect on your journey. Different is good and whatever form you choose to call it, it works. The meaning and feelings is clear in the connection of the words chosen. You manage yet again to strike a chord in me Gary..

I think it's brill.. (The kids still say that?) xo

Thanks, Def. I'm glad it worked for you. I can't beat 'striking a cord' so thank you, and as far as brill... I'll take that too...lol... thanks for the great review... cheers... Gary...

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On 01/25/2016 01:16 PM, Parker Owens said:

Excellent and succinct, as titled. I really liked this. Great how you made the transition to the final pair.

Thanks, Parker, for appreciating my word journey... it did flow towards the ending... arriving. I appreciate the great review... cheers... Gary...

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On 01/25/2016 09:32 PM, Bucket1 said:

Very "stream of consciousness", taking us on a journey and arriving at the end :)

It kind of was, wasn't it? Thanks for your take on things, as always, my friend... love the review... cheers... Gary...

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On 01/26/2016 07:32 AM, J.HunterDunn said:

An original way of giving your thoughts during a journey a place. There are several pairs that are food for reflection in itself and could well serve as writing prompts. Much room for filling in the blanks. A lovely poem, Gary. Thanks.

Thanks so much, Peter! I enjoyed this... it alleviated the turmoil in my head lol. Much of poetry is up for interpretation and this was another way to express my own thoughts while letting others feel their own... thanks for the great review, my friend... cheers... Gary...

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Fine use of alliterations; I also like how there is an in-grained 'story' moving through the poem, from sad and lonely to hopeful and calm.

 

Very nicely done!

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On 01/29/2016 06:34 AM, AC Benus said:

Fine use of alliterations; I also like how there is an in-grained 'story' moving through the poem, from sad and lonely to hopeful and calm.

 

Very nicely done!

Thanks, AC... this one happened quickly... I kind of actually saw it as I wrote it, and to be honest, it's had a lasting effect for some reason...when I come back to it, it speaks to me. Thanks for the review, AC... cheers... Gary

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